So sad...Sad when money/greed/power come in between two lovers. Especially one who obviously had loved the other very much. I love how you encorportated the song through out the story, espescially between his thoughts. It was like I was sitting right there on the porch.
I really like it! Good job!
The classic tale of two friends in love with each other but unaware. I like the twist of the cowboy. For whatever reason the temptation of a cowboy is very...irrisitable to women, I speak from experience! haha. Anyway, it was a very emotional and well written piece. Please keep on writing!
A very, very good piece. It kept me on my toes the whole time and interested. I read it twice, once with the lights on and then with the lights off. The effect is greater with the lights off but it still gets its point across. Is it really a true story or did you just add the "he's still out there somewhere" for effect?
Anyway! Keep it up, it's great!
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