This is an amazing letter, I hope you got the recognition you deserved for such a heartfelt letter to yourself. The ways you describe troubles and try to encourage or push yourself forward are both relatable, yet very personal. It feels to me like a parent or mentor talking to a young student or child, and that really helps the tone of the piece.
A very nice, short, bittersweet, and heartfelt poem about heartbreak (I think). I hope you keep writing and developing even more wonderful poems in the future!
I really like the descriptive detail in the piece! While I can't fully figure out what this is meant to be about, I can't say that's entirely a bad thing. My one critique so far would have to be punctuation, as it can help break the sentences up beyond the periods themselves, other than that great work!
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