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Review of CHEATED ON!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I like the general idea of this poem, the message is real powerful, but i think some parts of it need to be rewritten.

..."to show him that i'm real, and not pretend!"...

i really like this line, it's very well written. good sentiment, very powerful, very strong.

..."now he will no, what it's like to be alone!"...

this one needs to be rewritten, in my opinion. maybe....

to make him know what it's like to be alone

or something to that effect.

all in all, this is good, strong poem, but in order to be stronger, some parts of it need to be rewritten. very good, though, i like the thought!
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Review by honeybea420 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Unratable.)
i love this poem; the information will be helpful, too as i am wanting to study poetry and get a degree in writing. to me, poetry is integral to my writing; i am always writing down lyrics, poems, lines of words, sometimes just free-writing it (my word). thank you for the helpful information.
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