I love what you do with sentences. I believe many would claim that they're too long, too unwieldy. But I hope you don't change your style... they are long, they are sometimes unwieldy. But they deliver fluid storyline, brimming and boiling with emotion, content and context simultaneously.
I think it's uniquely powerful, and I hope others recognise it as such.
In terms of negative criticism, I would only suggest that some choices of words seem inappropriate: e.g. ' I astrologically project...' .
In addition, the connections between paragraphs/sections need some editing. You use ' Next..' and ' Next up..' too much, and as a reader it begins to aggravate slightly.
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