I like how you made your rhyming scheme become more sophisticated as the poem progresses...at least, that's what I really noticed as interesting and awesome.
I tend to freak out about writing poetry because my rhyme choices are always 'boring' to me, and I resort to simplistic ABAB quatrains that I must have writer's block with trying to wax poetic...
...but your rhyming patterns here are cool that they start very short and simple and end up flowing and gushing fluidly into more syllables by the end...
Love it! I'm supposed to submit 250+ characters but I'm not sure what to say...I know I've felt or that I feel the same way but when I try to 'write' about this feeling it comes off as more details like "...so when I was talking to so and so they said something hurtful and I'm still stewing over it and I expected them to say something totally different and now I want to forget that what they said even counts in my life!"---kind of thing.
I'm still a relative 'newbie' on this site and I only posted two small snippets of unfinished things, but I saw your story and I love how you started off with the term "townies"...great!
(Now I'm trying to figure out how to 'post' this review or comment and use this site more often.)
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