Still excellent, but this one didn't quite grab me the way previous chapters did. I'm not sure why, but maybe it's just a slight lull in the action or something... I loved the way Ean stood up to his parents, he obviously has a very strong will (assumedly tempered by having to grow up with those people!), which makes it all the more surprising and wonderful that he shows such a softer, kinder side to Erin. I can't help but wonder what Annabelle's gonna put Erin through, though, Erin's such an easy character to sympathize with I don't want to see her go through any more suffering... And yet, what kind of story would this be if all her troubles were over in the first few chapters? ^.^ Always looking forward to more of this series, keep 'em coming!
First off, let me say, *wow*. I don't give very many 5s, because I think perfection is unreal. That being said, the only thing I can think of that would make this work any better would be more of it! "Held" is one of the sexiest, most exciting, most intense stories to ever make me insanely jealous of a main character. Erin's been through so much without letting it break her, she deserves to let someone else take all the responsibility for once, and I envy her that chance. You have a way of writing that immediately makes the characters real, human, giving just enough description to form a clear mental image while still leaving the details to the imagination. I look forward to future chapters of this work with all the wonder and excitement of a child the night before Christmas! Keep the amazing work coming!
Another really great story! This one has an earthy, realistic feel to it, which makes the fantastic twist that much more of a surprise. I can't decide whether to envy the protagonist for getting everything he wants, or pity him for not wanting more. Or maybe envy him for not wanting more, just to be extra perplexing. The story made me think, and feel a little melancholy. I can really connect with the protagonist's desire to be a hero, and it makes me ad that in truth, heroism is seldom rewarded, in fact usually only gets the aspiring hero into trouble as well.
Reading this story, I start to wonder about the possibilities in my own life, had this or that happened differently. It feels... bittersweet? I don't know, it's complex. Definitely a great read though, and I don't doubt I'll read it again to see if it feels different a second or third time through.
Wow... You have a way of giving really vivid descriptions, I was constantly struck while reading by how detailed the scenes you set were. The story itself was creative, and at the same time carried a strong message about the value of life and how sad it is when life is wasted. The whole thing has the feel of a fairy tale, or maybe a vision, but at the same time, more intense than reality. I would offer constructive criticism, but honestly I can't find anything in this work that doesn't agree with me. I wish I could write like this! *lol*
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