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Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
I loved it. Great rhyming. I think you might want to be consistent with the last comment after each stanza, where you began with "I just know it" and "I am below it". It's missing in the last two. Otherwise, good job! Great way you incorporated the words you were supposed to.

Windy
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Review of Writer's Block  Open in new Window.
Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow! What a story. It's so believable. I liked how you mentioned it was hard to put into words verbally the story..being easier to write it. I have that same problem. Your story was very well written. I found no errors. Thank you for writing such a piece. I hope to read more of your works!
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Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I liked your story. You mention a lot of orange hues, which sticks with me. A couple of your sentences are run-on, but overall, you did a great job showing me what you imagined..the views of a child. Please don't follow that hand if it ever visits you again!

~Windy
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Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi there. At first I thought the green eyes were from an alien. I pictured a little green man standing on the side of the road. Then, it became a deer. What does the man look like? Any similarity to someone you might have seen in life? Have you really dreamt this for that many years?
A lot of my dreams stem from my Grandparents home where I grew up most of my youth. It's the one safe place in a somewhat tumultuous past. Everyone is amazed at how clear and defined my dreams are when I share.
You did a great job explaining your dream. Thank you for sharing it.

Windy
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Review of Just $29.95  Open in new Window.
Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow. I didn't know what I was getting into when I started reading this. It's like a twilight zone episode! Was he really asleep? I think not. You did a great job on this.

Windy
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Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
I didn't know where this story was going at first. Your description of the man was complete...as if I could see him right in front of me. Good job!
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Review of The Fun House  Open in new Window.
Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What an interesting story. It was under the poem static item but I was pleasantly surprised to read it. Great for the upcoming Halloween season. This is the kind of story where I wonder if it really happened or are you just that good:) I found no errors and you wrote it well. Good job.

Windy
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Review of Love Daggers  Open in new Window.
Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I like this. Very gut-wrenching. Good verse and imagery.
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Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I know the feeling...

Windy
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Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this. It has feeling and relateability (is that a word?)
Good luck.

Windy
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Review of Crow Story  Open in new Window.
Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked this a lot. Nice story.

windy
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Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
It drew me in. I want to read more.

Windy
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Review of Leftovers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved this. Great job.

windy
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Review of Craven  Open in new Window.
Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem makes me think of assisted suicide. I hope you're not offended, just my eyes mind at work. I enjoyed it.
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Review of "Voices"  Open in new Window.
Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this. There are two things I would correct if it were me...the fourth line I think you're missing the word "of"; and the last line doesn't flow, even though the thought is good.
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Review of Apoc  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
The first para is a little confusing, but I love how the last two paragraphs go. It is dramatic...imaginative.
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Review of Toxic kiss  Open in new Window.
Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I didn't understand the significance of "three." I think it would be cool to limit it to a woman's kiss instead of stating both male and female. It would seem ever more potent. Just my opinion. I liked it, esp. the first 5 lines.
Windy
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Review by Windy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
As a zombie enthusiast, your poem seems more like a 'how to" on surviving.
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Review of The Bitter Truth  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I had a hard time following this. It reminded me of a fantasy. Overall, it's sad to me. Joy not being what it should be. Good luck.
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