I enjoyed the poem. It is nice to hear that someone has a love that strong to write about it. A few of the lines flow very well. I especially enjoyed the last line. I did not see any spelling errors. Thank you for sharing your heart with the writing.com community.
Keep on writing and sharing. I look forward to reading more from you.
This was a fun Madlib. I had fun doing this one with my daughter age 13, who had never heard of these. I will share more with her. These were fun for me as a child and I am glad to see them on this site. Maybe I will try making one myself someday.
The only recommendation I can make is the "with out" maybe combined to read "without."
The choice of word forms worked out well and read funny when we were finished.
Great job and I will look for more Madlibs. You have a knack for this genre.....keep on writing.
A great read, an awesome use of historical reference and scenery. I enjoyed the writers ability to draw a connection from the past to the present. The story was short and entertaining. I look forward to reading more from this writer. The writer has a gift for creating a hearty image in the mind of the reader. Thanks for the journey.
A very interesting read. I was on the edge of my seat trying to figure out what or who the speaker was and it was a sincere surprise. I enjoyed the visuals and the display of humility. The creature or machine is a watcher and recorder, but also learns and understands. As the reader you start to feel sorry for the machine because it is trapped and yet full of so much knowledge. I enjoyed your writing and I applaud the use of scenery and emotion.
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