You may want to work on your spelling, as it makes it difficult to read through this. Also, you might want to work on using less informal abbreviations in your writing, particularly 'ya' and 'thru', as it makes it sound less professional. You really need to check to make sure you don't forget letters on the ends of words.
Line 1: You accidentally capitalized the 'I' in 'is', misspelled 'yesterday', and although you put a comma at the end of woke, you put a capitalized T in 'the'. You either need to change it to a period, or un-capitalize the t. You forgot the d at the end of 'and'. You forgot the e at then end of 'before'.
Line 2: You may want to replace 'why' with what, instead. You misspelled 'feeling'. You might want to reword that part of the sentence as 'not feeling any pressure or know of any shame because'. You forgot to capitalize There. You forgot the e in 'something'.
Line 3: You forgot the d in 'and'. I'm not sure, but you may want to replace 'care' with cares, as care is a verb. Once again, the d at the end of 'and'. You forgot to put an apostrophe in 'won't'.
Line 4: You accidentally misspelled 'responsibility'. While technically not an error, you might want to replace 'thru' with through. You amy want to rewrite that sentence as 'knowing the darkness brings forth light'. I really don't know why you have that through there though, so I may be wrong. You accidentally misspelled 'confidence'. Again, the d at the end of 'and'.
Line 5: You misspelled 'devour'. I'm not quite sure what you mean by 'dressing up in your guard', you may want to rephrase that.
Line 6: Again, the d at the end of 'and'. You misspelled 'begin'. D at the end of 'and'.
Line 7: Forgot to capitalize the f in 'free'. You should use 'you' instead of ya. Rewrite as 'dust it off and throw it away.' You accidentally misspelled 'seek'.
If this is a stream of consciousness, which I think it is, I would strongly encourage you to go over them for spelling, punctuation, and flow before you submit them. It could have been good, but because of the many many small errors, it compounded into something that was hard to read. If you'd like, I'd love to go over the improved version of it as well, with you.
I thought the idea of the poem was very good. The idea that, even when you have no foreseeable choice, you can either choose to accept that and wait until you do, or you can fight against it and try to rip yourself a new fork is one that I have also been contemplating as well. If you take the compliant path, you will be forever miserable knowing you may have succeeded taking the other. If you take the other and fail, you will be miserable even if you back away from the decision to fight, just from the sheer failure of it.
As for the mechanics of it, it also is fairly good (as far as I can tell). You forgot to capitalize one I in the second portion, and an apostrophe in "it's" in the same. It could have flowed a little better, as right now it seems (at least to me) as all broken up, when especially for the subject of your poem, it should have a little more.
I absolutely loved your poem. For the most part, the flow is wonderful, and your choice of words excellent. The only thing that sounds a little off, and the only reason I didn't give this a perfect five, is that the fourth line doesn't seem to sync up well with the other three lines above it, although the rest of your poem does.
However, that may be intentional, my apologies if it was.
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