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Review of In search of love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I like your imagery with the lotus.

Possible suggestions would to drop the 'was' in line 2 and not repeating 'I found you' in line 4
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Review of Cat  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the play in cats need to be in boxes but are already putting their next adventure in the house.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like your juxtaposition of the hair and the importance it has in this poem.
And the parts of us all that remain in death as well both physically and hinting at the spirit left in the world.
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Review of White Cutlass  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
The first and third stanza it feels a little off and first read I thought you meant you as in your person and not the car.

Then the closing stanza feel a little heavy handed might want to look for another phrase for high specs and not end so hard on the word sex.
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Review of Autumn  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I can feel the energy you capture in your words. I can feel the winds moving my hair reading this.
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Review of Aloneness  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like the story you are telling in and it encapsulates feelings I have felt tugging at me time and time again.
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