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Review of The Temple  Open in new Window.
Review by Jaydan Williams Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really liked this work. I think that your writing style was very creative and the story line was well written. Your grammar was very well done and I didn't see any errors while reading this. I encourage you to write more like this, as I, a youth, liked this.
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Review by Jaydan Williams Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really liked this work. I think that your writing style was very creative and the story line was well written. Your grammar was very well done and I didn't see any errors while reading this. I encourage you to write more like this, as I, a youth, liked this.
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Review by Jaydan Williams Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I really liked this work. I think that your writing style was very creative and the story line was well written. Your grammar was very well done and I didn't see any errors while reading this. I encourage you to write more like this, as I, a youth, liked this.
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Review by Jaydan Williams Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Kassimel,

I enjoyed reading this piece of writing and I hope that you find my review useful.

*Tree* Emotional Impact

         *Leaf2g* What I Liked:
                   *Check*The emotional impact that this poetic piece had was well done. You conveyed your message to the reader very well and I believe that they will have an emotional connection with this piece.

         *Leaf2r* What I Disliked:

*Tree* Format & Rhymes

         *Leaf2g* What I Liked:
                   *Check*You used the "4 lines" rule to create a 4-piece stanza. For short poems like this one this structure is appropriate.
                   *Check*I noticed that the first stanza that you used the convention of "A-B-B-C" rhyming. (If you don't know what this is I will explain it if you wish to reply back). For the second stanza I noticed you used "A-B-A-C" rhyming. For the third & fourth stanza's I noticed you used "A-A-A-B". As lastly, the last stanza you used "A-B-A-C".
         *Leaf2r* What I Disliked:
                   *Check*You didn't stick with an organized way of rhyming. If you start with an "A-B-B-A" you should also end with an "A-B-B-A".
                   *Check*With this type of poem I dislike that you used "A-B-B-A" form. I think these go better with longer poems.
                   *Check*I couldn't find any syllables that match. Typically a poem will have a certain number of syllables for each sentence but I couldn't find anything like that in this poem.

*Tree* Voice & Imagery

         *Leaf2g* What I Liked:
                   *Check*I could easily understand the theme and the message being conveyed here.

         *Leaf2r* What I Disliked:

*Tree* Grammar & Mechanics

         *Leaf2y* Spelling:

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Review by Jaydan Williams Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really enjoy reading this piece of work. I found it very intersting right from the start and it sparked my reading. I like the writing style for this work annd you manged to put all the words together to make it all sounds just right. You did a very good job.
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Review of The Bathhouse  Open in new Window.
Review by Jaydan Williams Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoy reading this piece of work. I found it very intersting right from the start and it sparked my reading. I like the writing style for this work annd you manged to put all the words together to make it all sounds just right. You did a very good job.
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Review by Jaydan Williams Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I really enjoy reading this piece of work. I found it very intersting right from the start and it sparked my reading. I like the writing style for this work annd you manged to put all the words together to make it all sounds just right. You did a very good job.
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Review by Jaydan Williams Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
I really enjoy reading this piece of work. I found it very intersting right from the start and it sparked my reading. I like the writing style for this work annd you manged to put all the words together to make it all sounds just right. You did a very good job.
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Review by Jaydan Williams Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoy reading this piece of work. I found it very intersting right from the start and it sparked my reading. I like the writing style for this work annd you manged to put all the words together to make it all sounds just right. You did a very good job.
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