I really liked this work. I think that your writing style was very creative and the story line was well written. Your grammar was very well done and I didn't see any errors while reading this. I encourage you to write more like this, as I, a youth, liked this.
I really liked this work. I think that your writing style was very creative and the story line was well written. Your grammar was very well done and I didn't see any errors while reading this. I encourage you to write more like this, as I, a youth, liked this.
I really liked this work. I think that your writing style was very creative and the story line was well written. Your grammar was very well done and I didn't see any errors while reading this. I encourage you to write more like this, as I, a youth, liked this.
I enjoyed reading this piece of writing and I hope that you find my review useful.
Emotional Impact
What I Liked:
The emotional impact that this poetic piece had was well done. You conveyed your message to the reader very well and I believe that they will have an emotional connection with this piece.
What I Disliked:
Format & Rhymes
What I Liked:
You used the "4 lines" rule to create a 4-piece stanza. For short poems like this one this structure is appropriate.
I noticed that the first stanza that you used the convention of "A-B-B-C" rhyming. (If you don't know what this is I will explain it if you wish to reply back). For the second stanza I noticed you used "A-B-A-C" rhyming. For the third & fourth stanza's I noticed you used "A-A-A-B". As lastly, the last stanza you used "A-B-A-C". What I Disliked:
You didn't stick with an organized way of rhyming. If you start with an "A-B-B-A" you should also end with an "A-B-B-A".
With this type of poem I dislike that you used "A-B-B-A" form. I think these go better with longer poems.
I couldn't find any syllables that match. Typically a poem will have a certain number of syllables for each sentence but I couldn't find anything like that in this poem.
Voice & Imagery
What I Liked:
I could easily understand the theme and the message being conveyed here.
What I Disliked:
Grammar & Mechanics
Spelling:
Grammar Mistakes:
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I really enjoy reading this piece of work. I found it very intersting right from the start and it sparked my reading. I like the writing style for this work annd you manged to put all the words together to make it all sounds just right. You did a very good job.
I really enjoy reading this piece of work. I found it very intersting right from the start and it sparked my reading. I like the writing style for this work annd you manged to put all the words together to make it all sounds just right. You did a very good job.
I really enjoy reading this piece of work. I found it very intersting right from the start and it sparked my reading. I like the writing style for this work annd you manged to put all the words together to make it all sounds just right. You did a very good job.
I really enjoy reading this piece of work. I found it very intersting right from the start and it sparked my reading. I like the writing style for this work annd you manged to put all the words together to make it all sounds just right. You did a very good job.
I really enjoy reading this piece of work. I found it very intersting right from the start and it sparked my reading. I like the writing style for this work annd you manged to put all the words together to make it all sounds just right. You did a very good job.
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