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Review by Angustia Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello!
I really like the idea of this poem, but would recommend you take some time to check some mistakes in the writing. Perhaps consider adding a line or two to emphasize the mood? Aside from those, I think the poem has a nice rhythm to it. Keep up the good work!

There is a cave Jesus entered into Hell.

It is in Jerusalem ..

It is mentioned in The Canterbury Tales.

A well of souls below the City of Peace.

There is a roped path.

It stops at a pit.

All is silent.

All is quite.

The damned have nothing to say.


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Review of Our Kitty's Love  Open in new Window.
Review by Angustia Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Such a cute poem! I like how sweet and simple it is, the rhyme is so happy. It inspires a certain tenderness in me! I kinda wish my cats could understand it, it'd be adorable to recite to them. It's an adorable poem altogether. Thank you for sharing *Heart*
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Review of She's Alive  Open in new Window.
Review by Angustia Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really like this, you know, it's a poem that touches things I can relate to, and I imagine many people can too! I specially like that it seems as if the girl is just now realizing that she can decide over her feelings. That she can decide it's over. I loved it! It's a good work!
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Review of Acrosswordtics  Open in new Window.
Review by Angustia Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I gotta say, this is so clever it made me smile while I read. I enjoyed it lots!
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Review by Angustia Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This is so cool, really! I found it very entertaining, and funny! The rhythm is very nice, and I can't see any grammar mistakes at plain sight. It's a very good job, friend! I specially like how it has a very serious and captivating mood at first and then, oh no, the garlic! Keep writing!
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Review by Angustia Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
The first one I like a lot! The start of it is a little confusing, but by the middle I think you got a good rhythm, and it absolutely captivated me. Though I honestly didn't know what it was actually about until almost the end of it (idk if that was your intention?).

Oh, but the second one? Fam, I literally felt my stomach drop. I loved it. It gave me chills! It is a lot simpler than the first one, but I find it even more striking.

The third one is my favorite of the three. I am bad at explaining myself, but I can relate to the feeling it has, and I specially love the final lines with all my heart! Thank you for sharing your work, it's amazing! Keep writing!


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Review of forever falling  Open in new Window.
Review by Angustia Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I really enjoyed this poem. It is very raw with emotion, and I could relate to it to a point. It might be cooler if you worked on the pacing, but overall is a good one! I specially like the rhymes, and that it's got an interesting choice of words! Good work, friend!
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