Tragedy indeed, I am sorry I can not say more of the poem itself and the style in which it was written,I am unfamiliar with the style of poetry, but it is a piece to poignant to pass over. Words are needed for this devastating event in our history, more words than ever. So I praise your piece for the words, in it and you for writing them. May the entire site read and relate, and write some more to shed light on this awful thing so justice is done.
I thorougly enjoyed your poem, and I sure there are many others who will to, well written in its movement and the message was superb, it is definitely something so many can relate to. I am so glad I was able to read this, thank you for sharing your words, keep writing.
I definitely like the movement of this piece, and the rhyme scheme for the most part is very well executed and soothing to the ear, there is a word for it to describe the type of ryhmes you use I cant recall it off hand, but what I refer to is,
Walking along
a dusty dark road, or,
the scars they hurt again
wounds of the past interupt pain, (which I really like those lines btw)
but that ryhme with out total rhyming scheme is very fitting, Where I do think it went wrong is the change from that to the total rhyme for instance
dreams&means, or, unfolds&unsolds, I think those ryhmes threw in with the others take away from the poem just a bit, I would chose one or the other but not both methods, sorry if I went on, but I really do like this poem, excellent work
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