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Review by Mark Rider Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I was drawn in like a deer to water from the first paragraph. Great imagination and descriptive writing. I want to keep reading, to know more about the Eternals and Drifters. I am hooked and hope this becomes a book. My only suggestion, and please...this is just a suggestion, try writing this in third person. I do not know if it would work, but I had a thought as I was reading. I thought the main character sounded a little too self assured and the fight seen felt awkward from her point of view. Overall, at this pace, I would have finished this book in a day.
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