I think it's really great that you wrote about the smell of rain. Mentioning childhood memories is my favorite part because that's all I have is remembering when I was little and smelling rain coming. I can't smell it anymore unless it's really strong. You see I am a smoker of about 20 yrs now and that's got to be the reason. Even though I can't smell it your writing meant alot to me as does knowing how wonderful that smell is. Thanks.
Hmmm, ok, ok. This i could read many times over. Each time read through would reveal more to the imagination. I have wondered in the past how it would be possible to describe someone that you Love but saying I love you didn't work for me. I Love you has become so loosely used in our world today that when said to one you truly, deeply Love, it hardly had the emphasis i felt.
This has written the answer to that for to a tee!
Very neat piece.
Nice that the sunshine makes it all better.😊
For me, I love rainy days. Especially when it is extra gloomy outside and it pours real hard. I like it because it nature and it's different than a sunny day where as beautiful as that can be, I find it much easier to be distracted by life and take the nice day for granted. Until you stop at some point and realize the moment for a second and acknowledge the weather again before continuing with your task or plans.
for me I appreciate both kinds of days. Dark rainy days like what you wrote about seem to stay on the mind all day versus the sunny day. As you get in and out of your car or in and out of shops or your house, every time throughout your day you do these things you look at the cloudy darkness, asses the rain and so on. I've never parked my car on a sunny day and thought " ready? here I go it's real sunny out there". But you do for rain or dreary weather so enjoying it for me is much more satisfying.
As you can see I am quite a literal person.
Great poem though.
You said " this is what it felt like for me".
Does this mean you've recovered? Have you overcome the depression?
I too have been exactly there. Perfect description to the tee!
I hope you are better, but if not I could suggest to you what helped me make my depression a part of my past.
Please let me know. Otherwise if you're good now, maybe you would like to share with me your experience.
Also, I have something that I wrote while I was in the dark, cold, feelingless water and I could share that if you'd like ma to.😊
Once upon a time there was a majestic dragon who, for centuries had been the last of his kind. Everyday the dragon wished he could live among the humans just as all the other creatures of the world were able to. He longed for companionship and belonging. One day the dragon decided to head for a village he had heard was very far away. Because of that he often flew long into the night using his fiery breath to see the way. Until finally he reached the village where the humans awaited with spears, arrows, catapults, and a whole arsenal of other weapons to ward him off and protect themselves. The humans were given word of a fire breathing beast on its way to devour them. Because he was a friendly dragon it took little effort from the humans to send him away. He went very, far away. And to this day no one has ever seen a dragon ever again.
i AM in !!! 100% Couldn't agree more. I have to share how frustrating it can be to have this realization and belief myself and to not be able to spread this view like a plague. Its like having the answer to the universe and wanting, needing, to pass it on but your stuck in quicksand. Its like trying to run in a dream. Fixing myself, my core, finding peace in me in order to see peace around me was the turning of my life. I must give credit to The Dalai Lama and the Dharma for my inner findings. Born Lutheran, raised Catholic, married in Lutheran church, now part of the divorce statistic, firm unshakable believer in Jesus, i found myself very confused and lost at 32 years old. The one word that both you and i could understand to define ALL of this is Namaste. If our elected leaders of the world could only taste this way of life they wouldn't be going around proving to the world that our intelligence, what we have come so far in evolution only to discuss blowing each other up!?!? Ughhh
Anyway, i am soooo glad that i decided to open the review section. I will post this now and then add you as favorite. Hope to hear from yah and thank you very much. Have a great day.
I myself am not old but from experiences that I have had allowed me too relate to the old man and understand his feelings and thoughts. I thought about the elderly relatives that I have visited in nursing homes and assisted living conditions, most of whom have since passed. Briefly I thought of myself getting to old age and the things I had collected that hold memories holding importance over my decision to leave them behind as all that I had left.
Then the significance the bird! Upon each arrival being able to replace those "things" and emotions with joy and eager anticipation, to create a smile when all else was bringing him down was powerful.
Smile and live on old man!!
Good read! Great use of adjectives. I thought it was quite creative to have been haunted by Billy almost instantly instead of later on. Immediate retaliation to me was not the norm and therefor kept me reading on. I also enjoyed the time period although it wasn't mentioned. I have been left curious as to the priors leading up to the murder since you mentioned they were friends and raft mates. I think you did a good job.
The first thing that comes to my mind is dark and light. Also good and bad as in one of my tattoos of an angel and one of a demon. However both can be good as they say evil is necessary. There are many, many things that can be speculated about this diamond and coal comparison. And are they actually two dogs or are they emotions? Very short and simple yet deep and conversational. Love it!
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