I like this prologue very much. makes want to read the story. I could see him talking to himself. Over all it felt like he was not going to stand by while his kingdom was destroyed.
My favorite line: ...war is lurking again.
My only thing is I can't make out who Davros Serpenthelm is? I did read it a few times and I'm still not getting it .
I would love to read the first chapter if ya got one.
Hi there, First I must say I really really enjoyed your story. At moments laughed until my side hurt. This is my favorite line...I see relief. When I come out, so does the smell, "That's fiber for you," I absent mindedly say.
Just so you know my spell check says that the word "mindedly" is wrong. Its doesn't give anything to replace it, just thought I'd let ya know and also this... you for got the "s" in just.
I shake my head to clear it of this nonconstructive rubbish. The trees making up the thicket are not my worst problem. Large clumps of grass * jut* out of brackish water.
Is this story morally wrong? Yes or No?= I don't know if I'd say "morally" I don't really get where that plays. But I would say maybe Ironic. Please help me understand what are meaning. thanks and I really like the way you write.
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