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Review by JoABuilder Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really enjoyed this...it made me smile and I read it in a sing-song pattern.
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Review of New Life  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this, so good! So positive with a promise. Great job on the Monotetra Poem for spring.
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Review of No Souvenirs  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is just about the saddest thing I have ever read. I was hoping for a good fairy tale ending. Great job with the prompt. Thanks for sharing.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
No truer words were written! These actions are why I quit going out on Black Friday - after giving thanks for all you have, then you rush out to get more - so ironic. I liked your poem and am in agreement about computer shopping.
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Review of Travelling  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great job! Loved this.
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Review of Balloon Adrift  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Magnificent!
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Review of The Corner Shop  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was the cutest thing I've read in a long time. It is just so unexpected and full of hope and joy. Thank you for writing this wonderful piece. So creative and I can just imagine the little kids' faces when they heard the price tag of the items they wanted. So original! Great job.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Too bad you can't just flip a switch to turn those feeling off.

I would edit this line: She had probably dialed this number twenty fourth time.
Suggestion: She had probably dialed this number for the twenty-fourth time. Or She dialed this number twenty-four times.

It's amazing how some people can just get over other so quickly, makes you wonder if they even had feelings at all.

Scribbles!
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Review by JoABuilder Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Sweetest story. I was thinking ants, but finding legit peepdots is amazing.

I loved your story, it made me smile and have faith people's imagination is the best thing.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I understand this so much, experienced the same. No one ever called to check on me nor asked me to return - it's like out of side out of mind. I know how personal this is to you. I enjoyed reading your poem.
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Review of Day 1 Prompt  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This made me very sad...as I have the same memories of my own mother and now wonder if my son feels the same about me. I think it is sometimes hard for people to express their feelings. I believe your last sentence, "This memory now brings me regret..." why would you regret it if it is the only memory you have where you felt at ease. Maybe for regret of all the other times when you didn't feel that way?
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Review of The Nightmare.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A little twist at the end...so its a dream and your mother really isn't a vampire? Because if she was you wouldn't be able to see her reflection in the mirror...well that's the way I'm reading it. I like the twist - and it is you're too strong.
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