Tremendous power in your written words, my friend.
Very clear and concise with the ability to share a vision that many can easily picture from the words that you have depicted.
I offer you the challenge and the opportunity to be THE ONE that you speak of, to be the one that will rise up against fate to make that change that you wish for.
The power in your words can do that and it would be a delight to receive them and your individual contribution could very well give us the things required to fly above the rest..." BE the change you wish to see" - Mahatma Gandhi
The story has most of the ingredients of a horror movie, but it feels unpolished somehow. There are a few missing words , so I have the impression that further editing maybe needed.
The cause of the madness is not explained fully but that could be deliberate, in which case the ending of the story gives it more of Twilight Zone to it, leaving the audience wondering how it all came about.
I enjoyed the storyline but feel it could use a little more character and background build up.
As I read through your story...somehow I knew that this thing, or person that you were writing about would reveal itself to be someone or something that we all know and have experienced.
You kept the intrigue all the way to the end as I read it, I could picture a moment in my life, when "they" were out there and I asked my self the same question "Why Me"...It took me specifically to a time when I almost felt that I should only go out with a cloak and dagger.
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