Wow! I found this compelling. Did you write this from persoanl experience?
You caught a lot of great nuances, the emotion, the stubborness from James.
What I couldn't figure out though, is whether James and Kate's relationship was already strained, or if it was due to the circumstances.
I hope it was circumstances.
Well done.
I loved the visual description in this. I was left wondering what it was that changed Sorrow Creek. Either that was omitted or I missed it.
It left me wanting to know what happened.
Also, just a few sentence structure issues, but that said, I loved it overall.
Please keep writing.
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This allows me to not only post my own work and learn from the comments, but to view other work as well.
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Finally a place where aspiring writers like me can be heard.
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