I blame the spell checker!
or do you really see the small minority yielding wedges of power.
as an old dyslexic triple cabbage, I get where you're coming from.
it would have been 4 stars but for the fact that the typo is a howler.
a spell checker once turned a piece about David Attenborough into a piece about a naturist.
I think the worst sinners in terms of making science a religion are science teachers they have their canon law, not the theory of thermodynamics and they have their profits the universe has to be that way because joe blogs says it does.
I would question one point you made in particular. on a clear still night there is likely to be a ground frost on a cloudy breezy night less so. this suggests to me that radiation might be more important than you suggest.
The prefix ab as in Aboriginals, every other ab word I can think of is negative. look at what the people who came from say it means. where on earth do they mean?
I’m not sure I want to join a group of one.
but after a life time of avoiding writing, I now need to learn to write to express ideas.
I think this may appeal to you. https://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/224...
the stars are for having the confidence to start a group of one.
I liked this. I kept flip-flopping between its a dream sequence and some sort of uncontrolled teleportation event.
one tiny thing I did not like early on was the use of fractions of a second in the countdown. after the countdown has finished, and a stopwatch has stopped, then it is possible to know the time to fractions of a second.
I am more of a behaviorist and prefer the definition of intelligence as.
the ability to show successful behavior in a given situation, and to adapt that behavior as the situation changes.
as someone who is new here my self let me welcome you and thank you for your story.
as you are a better writer than I, I will leave others to talk to you about the technical things, I will say I was quite amused by the story idea. and to me, good ideas are what matters.
one small thing, the next post could you use a larger font. size 4?
I remember catching an item at the end of the BBC news about a quire of Palestinian children in Bethlem singing Silent Night a German carrol in Hebrew. It sounded lovely.
one of the lessons that I have been shown here is that it makes a text easier for your readers if you break it into paragraphs either with an empty line or by indenting the first word.
just above the box is your word processor options I recommend font size 4
was this really produced with a dictation program? witch one? it as been a long while since I last look at it. my experience quickly turned out word salad.
I don't know if it is considered good etiquette to comment on a competition entry but I suspect this was and pasted in, and that this has caused the lines of text to get slightly out of whack.
don't let the stars go to your head I needed to give some to this message through, as someone who makes lots of mistakes, I can honestly say that the little cogwheel above each piece in my portfolio gest a lot of use.
one: some of your sub titles are bold and some are not.
two: it is a subjective thing but I think that the layout of the main title could have been made more attractive.
the main thrust of the argument, that traditional knowledge in areas like traditional; crops, farming techniques. should be, and increasingly are, valued as part of a sustainable food production system. is of considerable interest and well worth knowing.
being dyslexic I am exceeding my knowledge here but I feel I must point out that some of your complex sentence are difficult for an ordinary reader such as my self to follow.
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