Great Story and well told. Good beginning but it was a bit confusing since right after the first paragraph the reader was 'back in time' without any transition to ease the process. Also when you describe Roy, I think you meant undemonstrative in terms of his being reserved, etc.
Rapacious giggles may be an appropriate use of the word but the word rapacious itself seems a bit 'high falutin'' for your 'folksy' story. Just my opinion....
Good that Roy had his last practical joke and you all appreciated it. And, in fact appreciate it over and over again over the years.
Oh, Doremi, that was a very good story. It moves along smoothly and one can visualize all the 'aspects of green' you so carefully specify. I"m ot sure where the idea germinated but it was a good one. Thank you for sharing that and I notice you penned it nearly 10 years ago. IF you were that good at story-writing then, heaven knows, how expert you are now!!
The virulent grass sounds a bit like what I know of kudzu in the south which tends to take over things too. Don't know if that's true or not but your specialty grass may be an off short or predecessor to that!
I found no technical difficulties to spout off about and everything seemed very good indeed.
Now I shall read other things in your 'port' as you called it.
We can swap expertises on writing. That would be fun.
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