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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I've been there. This reminds me of an experience after my first love. It was very good for me because it showed me that I could love again.

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Review of SELFISH LOVE  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very good reminder. I think more people need to hear this message.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This conveys a very strong mood. I've had similar moments, though I don't have many opportunities these days.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review of The Beast  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thank you for giving my brain something to chew on.

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Review of Arthur's Return  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a delightful read. I like the tone you used in this piece.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. I believe I have faced demons of this nature.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review of Almost Immortal  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

This reminds me a lot of how I felt about my first love. Cherish those feelings, but move on if needed.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thank you for taking me on this journey with you.

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Review of My introduction  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is short and to-the-point. It could benefit from some more sentence variety. 7 out of 8 sentences start with "I." It is expected for many sentences to start with "I" when writing in first person, but it does make the piece dull to read if too many sentences have the same structure.

Example on how to change sentence structure:
I love my family members and they also love me. --> My family members and I share a bond of love.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (1.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This implies that there is something bad about being an old person. I don't understand how 40 out of 40 people could feel pity over a person getting older.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Mystic Eyes  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a very sensual poem. It reminds me a bit of a song about a moth drawn to a flame.

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Review of THE ICON  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I'm sorry to hear you had to go through that with your mother. My mother lost her mother to cancer as well, and her education was impacted as well.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture in just a few words.

I noticed some shifting between past and present tense. Please pick one and do your best to stick with it.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This isn't the first time I've heard about this. I don't watch SNL, so specific examples of things they've talked about that aren't funny would help me to understand the problem better.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for these grim reminders. Have you ever heard of Father Nathan Monk? He's a former priest, but he keeps the "Father" title because he provides services for those who were rejected by the church but still desire a sense of belonging among a community of believers. He does gay weddings, etc. I also find a lot of comfort in his work.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a delightfully refreshing poem. I just got out of a shower, and it matches my mood.

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Review of Odin (All-Father)  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a beautiful piece. I like getting a chance to read about a spirituality that's not one of the big mainstream ones.

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Review of UNCHARTED DESIRES  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is some wonderful advice. However, I believe the saying is "responsible" rather than "reasonable."

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

I also recommend encouraging people to seek professional help if needed. These questions are a good starting point, but they might not be enough for some situations.

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Review of "Lipstick"  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture and covered some powerful emotions in just a few words. This is very masterful writing.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of LIES  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great piece. I wish my ex-boyfriend understood this wisdom.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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