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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This collection provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for sharing.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Newbie!!!!  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I wish I could help, but I've got a toddler and can only spend a limited amount of time on the computer every day. I know there's a group specifically for finding beta readers on Goodreads, though.

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903
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. I think many of us can relate to these experiences.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an intriguing premise. It also provides a lot of food for thought.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as am, are, is, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

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Review of Tales of a Hacker  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I like how you introduce the characters right away and show their personalities through their actions.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as am, are, is, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

Example:
He was always in a flannel shirt and suspenders.
-->
He always wore a flannel shirt and suspenders.

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Review of Next Radar  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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908
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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909
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
I am also running a contest in case you are interested:
 
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910
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very interesting tale full of juicy details. You avoid insignificant details so the reader stays engaged. Great job!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for requesting my review!

The quality of the writing here is excellent. If this came to me as a submission (before I had a kid - I can't take on any more work at the moment) I would read the rest of it because my press only accepts completed works, and I like stories that have a message society needs to hear.

I love the way Kieran made her entrance!

Keep up the good work, and submit this to lots of presses. You might get 50 rejections, but that's pretty normal in the industry.
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912
Review of Humraaz  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I'm not sure if this refers to three or more humans in a relationship with each other or multiple humans in a relationship with God. Either way, it sounds very beautiful.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Fae By Moonlight  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. I love royal settings like this.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I love Y/n fanfics! I'm not personally interested in this fandom, but it looks like you have a great start here!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great introduction. Keep up the good work, and I'm sure you'll have a lot of fun with writing!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a beautiful picture with your words.

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Abuser  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

I went through a similar situation, but thankfully, he avoided talking to my friends, and my parents never believed him.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Bridges  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. I think this is a very good message for people to hear.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! This isn't a fandom I follow, but I am glad you are writing about what inspires you.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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920
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. It be interesting, to say the least, to see what the future holds.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
I am also running a contest in case you are interested:
 
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great concept. I recommend throwing in a question or three to entice the reader. Example: How will the protagonists navigate the complexities of their emotions as they face their dilemma?

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Heavenly Family  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
I am also running a contest in case you are interested:
 
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a very imaginative story, though the grammar could use some work. I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
I am also running a contest in case you are interested:
 
FORUM
Not Just Another Brick In The Wall  (ASR)
Most teachers are amazing, but sometimes . . .
#2281472 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an intriguing concept. However, in order to hook the reader, I recommend starting with some direct action as you introduce the characters.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
I am also running a contest in case you are interested:
 
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