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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review of Anger journal.  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I know some people who might find this beneficial. Thanks for sharing this idea!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Lost Without  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. I connect with many of the sentiments here.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Review of struggling  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. It's important to keep these things in mind when we vote.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I like the alliteration you used here. It really ties the piece together.

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Review of Dark Matter Drive  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. I do my best to live in the moment, but I don't always succeed.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing this. It's important to call out people who are in the wrong.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

The human mind is indeed terrifying. You did an excellent job addressing this difficult topic.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Wow, this seems to be a popular theme here. It's not for me, but I hope you get some good reponses.

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Review of Too Stubborn  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I've been there. It's especially difficult when you throw a toddler in the mix.

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Review of Dangerous Dreams  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This certainly captures the essence of a classic utopia. Excellent work!

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a lovely piece. It flows smoothly, and the words are very comforting.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Promise  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thanks for taking me on this journey with you.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of A Tale of Two  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

My first love from 2007 said, “I’d have it no other way,” a lot. I still love him deep down, but we will likely never meet again. He gave me a gift, though. He showed me what's possible and set the standard for everyone else. I didn't fall that hard again until 2015. Then, well, sometimes people are taken away from us far earlier than we expect. My first piece here on writing.com was a grief piece. That taught me to appreciate time with the people who are here in my life now. I got married in 2018, and now we have a beautiful son who is 20 months old.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep it up, and I am sure you will improve rapidly.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

This was an enjoyable story. I like how it ended.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of A Fear of Needles  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Oh, I've been there, too! My dad and I both have veins that are difficult to find. Once, they had to call in a more experienced nurse to take my blood.

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Review of Forgotten Harvest  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a glorious picture with your words. My grandparents also had a farm, but they didn't work it themselves. They rented out the land.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This opened well, but the rest was rather difficult to follow. Setting aside your writing for a week or a month before editing can help make it more coherent.

I also recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of NO HEADED DRAGON  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is quite intriguing.

“It’s” is a contraction for “it is.” If you want to make it possessive, drop the apostrophe. This is the single most common grammar mistake I see among beginning authors, so you’re not alone in this.

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Review of Cycle of Life  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very encouraging piece. I've certainly been through my share of ups and downs!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Sonder  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a lovely introduction. As they say, the eyes are windows to the soul.

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Review of How to be evil  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've expressed the premise well, though if this is supposed to be the prologue or first chapter and not a synopsis for the back of the book, I recommend jumping into the action to hook the reader. Talking about the characters without showing them interacting with each other is what editors call an infodump.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of SELF ESTEEM  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Growing up as humans, it is highly important for our parents to work majorly on our self esteem. When they show us love, we learn to love ourselves. Unfortunately, many children do not get enough love from their parents and must hire therapists to tell them it's OK to love themselves.

https://youtu.be/bF3j5UVCSCA

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
I am also running a contest in case you are interested:
 
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