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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an entertaining story. I'm imagining a bunch of scientists trying to catch a common housefly.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Tell me your name  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a delightful and uplifting story. Thanks for making our days brighter.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Cloe  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words.

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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1205
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing this deeply personal story. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review of Open Your Wings  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a sweet tale. I like how it ended, though I think it could benefit from a few extra little facts about eagles.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a lovely story. I like the unexpected turn it took.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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1208
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an interesting tale, though I do have one qualm with it. Lions typically work together as well. In a harem with many lionesses, the ladies do the hunting. Lions who can't manage to rule a pride with lionesses will often roam together as a pack as well. Sometimes, you even see a lioness who takes many lions for her mate.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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1209
Review of Little intruder.  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
I am also running a contest in case you are interested:
 
FORUM
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Monthly contest for people who find joy in lewd things.
#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me of a dream I had about my first love, though the names broke the fantasy for me.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Keep it up, and you can weave this into an epic tale.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I love how you described love here, especially how it cannot be destroyed.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

It's possible that you're asexual. Sex is a wonderful part of life for many people, but it doesn't need to be a part of your life if you don't want it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The traveler  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is quite spooky. It feels unfinished, though. It makes me wonder what happened next.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was an interesting story. I can't help but wonder if Aurora could have avoided getting kidnapped in the first place if she had been allowed to try martial arts.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review of Beauty Within  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review of Mittens  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a delightfully sweet story. However, the ending would be even sweeter if the protagonist conquered more obstacles along the way.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start, though I recommend developing the characters more.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review of The Devil Prince  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an intriguing story, though it raises some questions. Why was he separated from his parents in the first place? Lately, my husband and I have been watching Lucifer, in which all demons were abandoned by their mother Lilith. The main demon character in that story deeply resents being abandoned and has a lot of issues to work through as a result.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This sounds like a repressed memory of a rape.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great premise.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought and has the feel of a fable.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review of A Magical Ending.  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
I am also running a contest in case you are interested:
 
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a sweet and simple story, though it could be more interesting if Sara had to overcome more obstacles.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a simple story with a happy ending.

However, as someone who has struggled with my weight ever since I can remember, the answer is often not that simple. Genetics, psychological factors, and (as more recent research has shown) our gut microbes have a lot to do with our weight. It would be good to explore the reasons why Juanita was eating so much junk food in the first place. Is her mother also overweight? Did her mother work long hours that prevented her from cooking healthy meals and packing Juanita's lunch? Juanita sounds like she is old enough to learn how to cook, so perhaps spending time together cooking healthy meals could be a new mother-daughter hobby. Where is Juanita's father? Could the loss of Juanita's father have caused Juanita's mother to have to work long hours as well as to withdraw emotionally from her daughter? Did Juanita start eating more to fill an emotional void?

Adding more obstacles for Juanita to overcome can also make the ending sweeter.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan



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