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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
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Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review of Friday the 13th  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This poem turned into quite a journey. Thanks for taking me on this adventure with you. You painted a vivid picture with your words.

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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

I jumped into the middle of this, so I haven't had a chance to get familiar with the characters.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

Keep up the great work, and I'm sure you'll improve rapidly!

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

I find it odd that Greek deities have influence in Washington. Indigenous peoples have their own sets of deities, and I'd like to see them holding influence over the land.

The airhead joke was cute, though.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I feel much the same way about writing. Now that I've become a parent, however, I don't even have my hands free very often, and when I do, my brain isn't geared up for writing. My son is currently taking a ride on my husband's back while he cooks dinner and my son is hollering every time he drops whatever toy I gave him two minutes ago.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! I like how the protagonist knows what she wants and isn't afraid to get it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Blinded  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an intriguing story. Now that I'm a mom, I'm curious about whose milk the narrator drank. A world without restaurants seems like it would also be a world without infant formula.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very sweet story. Personally, I begged my parents for a cat, but they got me a dog first, and I loved them both.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of A SIGHT TO BEHOLD  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

I like how the narrator puts the other person on a pedestal here. That's one of the best parts of being in love.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This is very sweet and heartwarming. Santa is a great way to spark the imaginations of little ones.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review of Witches Stew  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This is a very fun poem. The hairs from a presidential candidate made me laugh the most.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review of WITH YOU  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This poem carries some powerful emotions. Humans are generally not wired to be alone. We have a biological drive to find companionship. Without it, our species would not exist.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of EVANESCENCE GLORY  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture in just a few words. Thanks for taking me to this place.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Dust  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thanks for taking me on this journey.

The focus on the black man came off as racist, though.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

I've always preferred winter sports to other sports, too. Perhaps it's because I've never lived in a place that gets cold enough to have winter sports outdoors.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review of Betrayal  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very powerful piece. I've had this experience with someone. This was my breakup song during that time:
https://youtu.be/MyShkaAwbR8

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

I recommend organizing this piece into shorter paragraphs for easier reading.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Alan  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a lovely piece. You go a bit heavy on the -ing verbs, though. Something that ends with ing is in continuous tense, meaning that the action is ongoing. It's best to use it when someone is doing two things at the exact same time.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Vampire Bouncer  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. The narrator has a strong voice, and his motivations are clear.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Since this is tagged as an action story, I recommend diving into the action sooner to hook the reader.

The puppy was a cute surprise. Given that wolves are mammals, I'm wondering whose milk the puppy will drink. However, in a fantasy universe, the puppy could easily live on mana or something along those lines.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thanks for requesting my review!

I like the colorful metaphors used to portray emotions in this piece.

I like the way you explained how they were not obligated to follow the law and could do however they pleased.

The ending was short but very satisfying.

I think this piece would be perfect in an anthology of related stories.
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This piece carries some strong emotions. Thanks for sharing this powerful piece.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is not a personal fetish of mine, but I am glad you are writing about what inspires you.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Missed Call  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

That is a painful lesson to learn, but I am glad things turned out OK.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Door  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is very mysterious indeed. The great thing about mystery is that it ignites curiosity, and this poem certainly does that!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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