I'm glad to have come accross this piece. It is very helpful and informative for all writers, not just new and unpublished ones. I liked how you gave clear examples of what to do and what not to do when sending a query for magazines and books. This piece covered exactly what it stated it would in the opening paragraphs.
I liked how you captured the feel of rain. I have a few suggestions that may help withe the flow:
Line 2: reflecting car headlights
Shows belonging: Reflectiong car's headlights
Line 3: Raindrops stream down from the car windows
Shows belonging: Raindrops steam down from the car's windows
Lne5: The roses that have been planted by an old and long forsaken gravestone are brown and drooping, like a dogs tail when he is afraid.
Maybe change to: The roses that have been planted near an old and long forsaken gravestone are brown and drooping, like a dog's tail when he is afraid.
I've never been one for poetry but I really enjoyed rading this piece. It hink that it captures the true spirit of motherhood without being too sappy. I could see this on a Hallmark Card. :)
Really enjoyed this. I made me think of being a child and allowing my imagination to run wild. Its unfortunate that as whe age we often allow ourselves to conform even in the simple task of using our imaginations.
Keep up the good work. :)
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