Your piece seems well referenced and knowledgeable and I really liked that. I learned a lot about African history and about Nigeria. I took a class about Queer Politics and I know that in America, the term homosexual didn't come about until the early 20th century or so. The ancient civilizations seemed to have a different attitude than the modern one concerning male/male sexual relations.
I found this article to be very honest and informative. I agree with you one hundred percent. I think that a lot of writers need to read this and realize how important experience is as opposed to the point and click writing programs.
I really enjoyed this flash fiction. I was looking at the random reads and the tagline caught my eye. Accepting situations in life ALWAYS seems hard to me! I was right there in the story about how much the main character missed Jason. I gave it a 3.0 because I didn't feel like it had a strong beginning, middle, and end. This could be a great beginning for something!
I really enjoyed reading this piece of poetry on spring. The format seems perfect with the words and subject you chose. I'm glad you explained it in the bottom of the piece and that I could learn more about the modern 5-line cinquain format. This is the first time I've ever seen or heard of it. Thank you for the great read!
This is amazing! I love poems that leave me breathless because they are so powerful. I think it really says a lot at about how we look at the world and what we get from it. You should enter this in a contest or something. I really think it would win. I think everyone should read it! I've read and reread it several times and have no tips for you. Beautiful work!
This was my first madlib and it was very entertaining! Some of the words really didn't fit, but the ones that did were absolutely hilarious! This was a pretty good story for the placing of random words. I was practically grinning the entire time. I especially loved that you made it fantasy.
That was too funny! Your first paragraph immediately caught my interest and I was dying to know why she was a real knockout. Even though I'm not really interested in boxing, you kept me hanging on for more. There was enough details there for me to understand what was going on, but not bore me. You described the perfect sexy tease while Theresa sat behind her desk. Perfectly entertaining! There was a point where you described Theresa's hair and you capitalized "Blonde" where it should be lowercase. Great story!
I love the daily flash fiction contest so I immediately clicked on your article. I thought your tips were very spot on and helpful! I think that you should italicize or bold your first sentences after the number that way it leaps out at the reader what exactly is important. Just a thought! Thanks for the tips! Great article!
This was great! I loved how the story unfolded with flowers back and forth. The flower metaphor for the baby was a good one. It was so bittersweet to read that she had to turn her back on the flowers in the end. It makes me wonder about the baby and why she left him when she was going to have his baby. Really good poem!
This was so goodt! I was completely hooked with beginng word "Never". I really felt the sweetness of the revenge with your words. You created such a vivd picture with few lines and it was awesome! The last word "Suffer" really brought it home for me. Good stuff.
Haha! This was too funny! I'm not sure if you named the Mayor Devlin, Devlin, on purpose, but I really got a kick out of it. It reminded me of devil which fit with the whole Hades theme. Great response to a prompt! You seem to have a knack for humor.
I love the daily flash fiction prompts! This is a great one! I'm beyond interested and am dying to read more! Do you ever decide to lengthen your flash fictions?
I'm very interested in this story! You really know how to bring your characters alive with dialogue. I definitely want to know more about what, who, and how Reeves works and the world he lives in. To me, this seems like great building blocks! I gave it a 4.5 just because of some nit picky grammer things you could work on. Great work!
The beginning two stanzas were awesome! I feel like the second to last stanza wasn't really in competition with the rest of the poem. It's great work! I really had me feeling the infatuation that one gets for another. You also misspelled the word fase which is phase. Again, great poem!
I loved this!!! There were so many favorite parts that I'd have to quote the entire poem to express how much I loved it! It was fast and witty and just brilliant! It was meaningful and I could definitely relate so well to it. Absolutely amazing work!
You drew a clear portrait of a woman who was miserable that used passive agressive tactics to make her partner feel bad, too. I loved the way you described her tactics, how easily you showed her passive agressive ways. I could truly feel the strain that would put on someone. I liked especially how you had short stanzas that emphasized the feeling. I feel like it could use a little more embelishment and some lengthening, but that's just what I think. It's pretty spot on already! Great work!
This was amazing! Very clever and witty! I just love your vocabulary. I was rapt with attention throughout the entire piece. You made a told and true story of a bad class transforming with the help of an outstanding teacher absolutely incredible! Great work!
It's clear that there is a battle between passion and reason. I had to read this twice just make sure I grasped it right. I kind of feel that it doesn't flow quite right, but that's just my opinion. It definitely involved me enough to reread it. The struggle for reason while passion was winning was an intrigue for me. Good work!
This was enjoyable. The ending came out of nowhere. I felt a little weird about Cyndi because what was she doing while he was stalking the woman? It all seems very innocent. I guess if I were Mark, I wouldn't realize I was stalking. It did make me snort at the end that he just spilled the beans! If he wanted to please Cyndi so much then why was so engrossed with another woman? Just a few questions, but I thought it was great work. I think you built up Mark as an in depth character. Good plot. Nice work!
This was an amazingly emotional and heart wrenching! I devoured your words one by one. It's a truthful, tragic tale that is sadly so relatable. Beautiful work! The beginning kept me on edge and the ending just resonated with my soul. Each stanza was perfect with its weaving of the story.
This was great! You really drew me in and made me care about Azai as well as the protagonist. I badly desire to know what happened to him to make him so sad. The beginning was amazing and I just love your descriptions! I'm a sucker for eyes. They are the windows to the soul... :) There were a few grammatical errors, but nothing that hindered the flow of the piece. I think its funny that he knew her name and she didn't know his. Although her pettiness is a pitfall that makes her endearing and real to the reader. Very nice work! I hope you continue with it.
This is very thoughtful and cohesive. I enjoyed reading it! To me, I felt like you were saying that because your past was bright like a supernova, your present is "half lit". You seem to be longing for a future ahead of you that is full of supernovas.
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