Great form and style. The poem flows smoothly and the repeating stanza certainly makes your point quite effectively. I enjoyed the overall theme but poetry is subjective and I can see some viewers rationalizing this poem as idealistic. If you receive such a review keep mind that there are a lot of grinches in the world. I personally think the world needs a heavy does of idealism. Write on!!!
A wonderful reminder to those of us who have put years of tongue biting, fake smiles and little white lies. Love is about giving not getting. To truly love is to sacrifice and those in love would have it no other way. Your essay is very well written and your word usage is enthralling. I enjoyed this piece tremendously and applaud your devotion as well as your natural talent for writing! Thanks for the great read!!!!
A wonderful poem. I have had moments like this as I am sure most people have. To me I see a perfectionist that is harder on themselves when a mistake is made than anyone else could ever be. I also find it funny how those who witness the mistakes that these perfectionists make seem to relish in their coworkers demise. I enjoyed this because I can relate to the meaning that I derived from this work which was masterful by the author. When you leave a piece cryptic you force the reader to bring part of themselves into their interpretation making each readers experience with your poem different. Awesome Job !!!!!
This is a touchingly beautiful poem. I enjoyed the style and the smooth flow. The piece gave me just enough to become enthralled with it but left enough room for me to become personally involved with it . I am very impressed this is a new favorite and you have a new fan. Write on!!!!
Your style and form is well written and it seemed to flow very smoothly. I would have enjoyed it even more had it been longer. It had a very clear meaning which, I must admit, left the reader a little disengaged from the piece. I like poetry with a cryptic meaning because I find myself using my prior experiences to try to discover the hidden meaning and as a result I feel more attached to the individual work. I look forward to reading more of your work!!! Write on!!!
A beautiful poem. You are a wonderfulwordsmith. I can't tell wether I should be joyful, sad or feel pity. I like poetry like this. work that gives readers something to think about. Something to ponder. I immeduatly recalled my father and our disfunctional relationship and it made this poem personal to me. It is poetry in this style that keeps me reading. Write on!!!
Beautiful piece. I enjoyed the cryptic word usage. You are talented. I reviewed another poem and found the cryptic word usage lacking; however, this poem illustrates your ability to move smoothly from one style of poetry to another. This proves yourare truly talented. I must admitted that I am having trouble figuring it out and will be reading it and possibly rereading it again. Thanks for the mental stimulation! Write on!!!
Your style form and flow is technically correct. I have to say that I agree wholeheartedly.I must say that a little more cryptic word usage would have been enjoyable for me personally. I feel with a little mystery in a poem the reader tends to get drawn in because they are forced to bring their own personality and experiences with them. This gives the reader part ownership in a way and thus making it memorable. Keep in mind that peotry is subjective and for every comment like this there will be one by a reader who don't want to bring themselves into it. It is a good poem. Write on!!!!
This is a very thought provoking piece. I think you are a naturally talented wordsmith. I too would be saddened to see any spirit trapped where it cannot be what it was meant to be. However, fat Cat has a fierce spirit that dwells in the idyllic woods. Would it be any less wrong not let him be the clipper of wings that he was born to be? Who is to say which spirit is mightier? If fat Cat had wings then the majestic Eagle would gladly succumb to the cage that is the idyllic woods. I like your thinking process. I like your style. I admire your outlook on life.
Technically some might say that there is an error or two. However, this piece is one that need not follow the grammatical rules forced upon intellectual minded writers. Those that have an equal intellect can see the beauty behind every word placement, every capital, and every punctuation mark. Please do not change a thing!!!!
Overall this reads like one of those late night advertisements that we all have seen. This is a good thing! Companies spend millions of dollars in research alone just to find the perfect language usage that will sell their products and who is the most likely demographic to buy said products. So it looks like you have a lucrative future ahead of you. The only thing that might help polish it a little more would be to shorten your sentences a bit. Advertisements need to be as short and sweet as possible. For example, your sentence "With this fun and friendly guide in hand, you’ll discover how ACT!" feels like it should read, With this user friendly guide in hand, discover how ACT!...etc. Just a few words here and there would give it the mark of a seasoned professional. Good Job!!
First of all, your title was very catchy. It stood out like a diamond amongst dirt. I enjoyed the subject as well. I too have a few fuzzy wuzzy wonderfuls. The flow of the poem felt choppy and hard to follow. I found myself having to reread several of the stanza to make sure that I hadn't skipped a word and created the skip in flow myself. The form was fine and your word usage was very clever, but the flow really was the only issue that I could find. Please don't let this review discourage you. Poetry is very subjective. For every person that feels as I do there are surely just as many that wouls disagree.
This is a very cryptic piece. I usually do not find myself entertained with poetry unless the flow is even. However; your poem is very interesting to me as a result of your poems hidden meaning and your clever word usage. You forced me to interact with your piece in a way that let me bring my own experiences into use in an effort to try and detect its meaning. This made is very personal to me and I enjoyed the interaction very much. Write on!!!
I enjoyed the poem. For the most part it flowed smoothly and you are a talented rhymer. The beat seemed a little off at times, but only slightly. I think that you did a good job at conveying the meaning of the work while allowing the reader to become personally involved through interactions with your descriptive word usage. Good JOb!
Well constructed. The flow is smooth and even. I can relate with the subject of the poem as can everyone who was ever a child. Having grown and had children of my own, I can relate to both sides.
I enjoyed the story thoroughly. Your word usage is very impressive. I felt myself drawn in from the first word. Your subject was entertaining to say the least. Your title was very catcy however; I feel that it did not do justice to the piece. I am firmly convinced that with your talent for wordsmithing that you could come up with a title that gives more of a hint of the true nature of the story which is really funny! Your sentence structuring made the story a little hard to follow and I found myself having to reread several sentences. I think this story would benefit from more depth in detail. I wanted more information about the characters and would have enjoyed more detail during the stories climax as well. All in all, I felt it was really good. You are a talented writer and I will eagerly await more from you. Write On!!!
This is wonderful poem. First of all, how can you go wrong with a subject like cats. Having said that, I liked the flow of the poem although it did feel an occassional skip in the rhythm. I admire poets that can maintain a smooth pace and successfully convey the writer's meaning at the same time. This is often a result of clever word usage which you have obviously mastered. Write On!
Well Done!!!! I must say, it is refreshing to find a writer with a true understanding of the power that the proper word usage can give to a piece. Simply rearranging a word in a sentence can result in an entirely different meaning. In fact, this is a topic that I speak of often when referring to works that are written using such descriptive language. I could go on for paragraphs if it were not for the fact that this review is about your writing and not my obsessions.
Your title is cleverly done. It is catchy, grabbing the audience’s attention while clearly stating the purpose of the article all in as little as five words. That is quite the feat considering that I tend to struggle with my titles more than any other aspect of my writing. As your article so accurately states, your word usage projects a certain level of expertise that lends piece a great deal of credibility. Understanding proper sentence structure, my opinion is based on the actual legitimacy of the information contained within the article, however; your word usage will convince even the newest writer newbie possible that you are well versed in this subject.
Your information was very helpful and easy to understand. I could not help but be impressed with your teaching style. As a matter of fact, I imagine the writer of this piece to be some kind of educator. Your examples are not only clearly stated, they are of such a variety that they range from the basic examples that even someone with no writing experience would find helpful while also providing more complicated examples that even a seasoned veteran could learn from. I think that your readers would agree that the only thing lacking is more of the same. Thanks for the help!!!
Your poem was an enjoyable read. The title is catchy. I am bewildered by the meaning of the title as well as the meaning of the poem as well. In my opinion, this is not a bad thing. I enjoy poetry that forces me to search for the hidden meaning. I feel that when a reader has to engage with a poem in such a way they are more likely to indentify with the poem since they call upon their own personal experiences. As a result, the reader tends to attach their own meaning to the piece whether or not it is the meaning that the writer intended is irrelevant. I found the language usage was descriptive and helped encrypt the actual meaning of the piece quite well. The rythym and form are my favorite of all the poetry forms used. I look forward to more from you.
Your story is well told. The title , although catchy, is a bit misleading. I expected to read a story about moving forward, however; I was not disappointed by the story at all. In fact, I enjoyed the dialog mixed with it's descriptive narrative. I thought the dialog revealed alot of information about the individual characters' character.
The contrast between the first half of the story and the second was quite telling. While the first helped the reader feel compassion for the character in the second half, it also revealed an understanding of Clew and Zane's mentality through the unique dialog between them.
Having said that, I felt that there was room for more descriptive language and word usage. T I find the story did not command my attention. One of the things that appeals to me most about reading is the way I get lost in the story or poem, shutting out everthing else. With a few more descriptive words here and there, I feel as though it would be a brillant short story!
You are a truly gifted writer, please don't let my opinion discourage you. As a matter of fact, I look forward to reading more of your work!!!
Wow! I love your descriptiveness! Your word usage is supreme! I am a fan! You are a naturally gifted writer. I had to stop and reread a few times because your descriptions were shockingly beautiful! All I ask is that when you become published that you give me a signed book?
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