My grandfather and his two sisters (we called them our great aunts) dealt with Alzheimer's in thier later years of life. I visited my grandfather and and his two sisters as often as I could. It was difficult for sure, and half of the time I was sure they didn't know who I was, but they smiled and chatted nontheless, and when it was time to go, they never wanted me (or my mother who often visited them) to leave. I think deep down they felt a connection with us, even if they couldn't quite place who we were.
I liked the article and loved the stories/examples you provided but I felt that the article could have gotten a little more into Alzheimer's is. Many people don't really understand, and sure the stories you provided will give a little insight, I just felt there could be more.
The article was well written, good grammar and I didn't catch any spelling or punctuation issues. I think this article will be (or already was) great for your newsletter at work.
Wow. What an incredibly well written article. Easy to follow, great examples/descriptions, and amazing readability. I didn't catch any spelling or grammatical errors but I did get a little swept into all of the information that was in the article. I feel I have a pretty good understanding about the importance of my statistics. Thanks so much for writing this... my only problem with it is that I wish I could find some wrong with it!
How did I feel after reading this piece?:I'm not sure why but this poem didn't make me feel safe as if I were in my true loves arms. I felt more that perhaps it was a summer fling.
Typo's?:I didn't see any.
Grammar?:Poetry follows its own grammar rules :)
Story/Poem flow (how well the story/poem moves along)?:Really nicely, I'm not a huge fan of rhyming poetry but this worked really well and just smoothly moved along.
Why I gave the rating I gave:I'll be honest here, I think my rating was slightly influenced by how it made me feel. With poetry, I kind of rate based on feelings because I don't know a whole lot about poetry.
Any additional comments:I did like the poem as far as the poem itself is concerned... I'm not sure why it made me feel uneasy.
Disclaimer: I am only human. I may make errors in the review (I may or may not spell check the reviews, this will depend on how much time I have), misread a part of your story, or even misunderstand something within the story. For all errors, I apologize in advance. I wish I had more time to devote to reviewing as I truly enjoy doing it. Unfortunately, I have little time to devote to my hobbies, so in my review, I do the best I can with my time constraints.
Was the plot good?:So far I've only been able to read this first part, so I'm not sure of the plot yet. What I do know of it seems good.
Were the characters believable?:So far we don't really know them too well, we know Rona a little, and she is believable but could possibly be developed even further (which in future parts of this story I'd wager she is).
If the piece has dialogue, was it good/believable?:Not much dialogue, but what is there is good.
Anything I would change?:I think the 4th the paragraph should be split into two. After the description of Rona and before we start learning about her family.
Typo's?:I didn't notice any (although it is 1:30am!)
Grammar?:Seemed fine.
Story flow (how well the story moves along)?:It flows quite nicely.
Why I gave the rating I gave:There is room for a little improvement, for example maybe knowing some of the other characters a little better would be good.
Disclaimer: I am only human. I may make errors in the review (I may or may not spell check the reviews, this will depend on how much time I have), misread a part of your story, or even misunderstand something within the story. For all errors, I apologize in advance. I wish I had more time to devote to reviewing as I truly enjoy doing it. Unfortunately, I have little time to devote to my hobbies, so in my review, I do the best I can with my time constraints.
”somebody who did not know something about nuclear physics fourteen hundred years ago could not, I think, be in a position to find out from his own mind, for instance, that the earth and the heavens had the same origin.”"*
Is that a typo where is says:
"I think, be in a position to find out from his own mind..."
The story is written nicely and I like how you did some research and got some different quotes. Keep writing! :)
Why buy the cow when the milk is free eh? (is that how that saying goes? Lol) I don't know a whole lot about poetry structure, but I do know when I like it. It has good rhythm and flows, keeping the reader interested until the very end. Its a great poem, and I like it!
Uh. Wow. This is a good story, but a horrible experience. It really makes a person wonder if this goes on more than people think. I feel bad that you had to give up on your dream job because of some idiots who had no business sense, let alone common sense.
Just a couple of things...
1. Who is Daniel? The bride? The groom?
2. The story moves kind of fast, I realize its a short story, but it could be a little more descriptive, maybe of the scenery? Why does she feel so poorly about herself?
Just my opinion, fun to read though! I could relate to the main character! Good work :)
Justa
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Disclaimer: I am only human. I may make errors in the review (I may or may not spell check the reviews, this will depend on how much time I have), misread a part of your story, or even misunderstand something within the story. For all errors, I apologize in advance. I wish I had more time to devote to reviewing as I truly enjoy doing it. Unfortunately, I have little time to devote to my hobbies, so in my review, I do the best I can with my time constraints.