Hi. I really like the plotline and you handle the descriptions very well.
I must say, however, that I felt frustrated because I couldn't figure out what Rebecca's problem is. The only indication you gave was that "she didn't fit in." When I was in school, decades upon decades ago, that could mean anything from a pimple to misfitted clothes.
My (hopefully) constructive suggestion is that after you finish writing a story, try reading it as if you were someone completely unlike yourself. I hope that makes sense.
As a final note, I've read some of your previous submissions and you are getting better with each one.
Thanks for sharing.
Kelly
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