A very intriguing and catchy story, I could not stop reading it.
I would have liked it better if you would have described Tom better, I just did not get a good picture of what he looked like.
Also, I would have liked to read what happens after the door crashes down. That is something that I would write, even though it ends in tragedy.
It was quite fun, even though I would have liked it a bit longer and more complex. I can understand that you may not have had many ideas doing this, but when I run out of ideas I read other people's work to find inspiration. I take someone else's idea, think about it and make it my own!... It was short, but fun! Please do more. :D
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