I loved the theme, natures revenge against the ravages of man.
The use of folklore gave the story more depth and intrigue. The title was perfect, clever line, I don't want to give anything away.
There was some very nice imagery in the climax near the end.
I hate to say this because it goes against my usual opinion, but I thought the story could use a bit of a hook in the begining and was a little slow with unneccessary details in places.
What I thought the story lacked was in character description, how they looked, perhaps giving them some unique/defining attributes. I think the dialogue could use a little work.
I enjoyed the story, I love giant monsters and ancient Gods...
Very expressive and powerful piece of emotional depth, I particuraly admire the way the poem comes full circle ie. the way the last line ties it all together.
Very intriquing drama, nice dialogue. I like the way you included Wiccan magic in the piece gradually... and naturally. But I think the strongest part of the story was the characterization. The characters seemed like real people and their emotions very real.
Very cool story, werewolves are my favorite supernatural creatures. I really liked your description of the hunt, especially the part about their hearts beating together. I love the fact that you included the transformational fur coat in your story, a little authentic occult/folklore knowledge always improves a story, in my opinion.
Its a very nice little tale, but I think it needs conflict, and conflict resolution to be a full story.
Great characterization, very touching... was this from a prompt? I only ask because of the edition of Poe's "The Raven," in the story.
Its nice to read a story about a devoted and loving husband for a change. A man with a good heart, who is willing to make personal sacrifices for those he cares about.
Remedy is a touching treatment of the symptoms of the lovesickness. The breadth, an depth of this poem cannot be measured by the number of its lines. It can only be measured by the depth of feelings it portrays.
Lines that touched me:
"Yours is the only
voice that makes a sound"
That was a very original story, I thought he was going to get away! I think it could use one more rewrite, not to change anything but just to make it flow a little better.
Was that idea from a prompt? Anyway, I thought it was very creative and original concept. With some suprising plot twists which are always good.
Something I think almost everyone here can relate to, your honesty does shines forth in this article. A worthy effort at self examination and a hope all of us share, especially us newbies.
Thanks
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