Favorite line: "He cried deeply when he remembered Eric asking him to stay the night. He had reluctantly declined because of work the next morning." the classic self blaming.
If you decide to edit the piece, try the following:-
Pay more attention to the rhythm and flow.
Try comparing syllable count in each line to the same position in each stanza. e.g. Stanza 1, line 1 (syllable count 13) to Stanza 2, line1, (count11) etc.
Visual is better if the line count in each stanza were the same. Except for the first, with 6 lines all other count 4. Bottom heavy is easier to accept. It does not need to be perfect just closer.
The second periods (.) in every other line, should be commas (,) or just open.
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