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Review of wormwood.  Open in new Window.
Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I don't know. To me it comes across a mite grabled. I see promise in the piece and having drank absinthe I immediately felt a liking, indeed a certain draw to give it a second .

And I'm glad I did. What might have been lost in the first reading came across the second time around. I like it. I don't know why.
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Review of Dragonfly  Open in new Window.
Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dragonfly's. Friends taken before their time. I give you five to remember their lives, how they lived and died.

Thank you
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Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I think it needs some work. Althought the scenes you've carved onto the page are indeed visceral and spring to life in the imagination, a little polishing still needs to be done. In my humble opinion of course.

Nobody ever built a statue of a critic.
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Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! Phenomenal! Great writing and conjuring of scenes
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Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Great story! The downward spiral of the boy into evil is fantastically drawn. Having had an experience of my own with some incendiary devices during my youth I found the part where Tommy is in the woods trying out his explosives very tangible to me.
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Review of Lost Tries  Open in new Window.
Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Eh. . . not my cup of tea but a lot of work went into this and it shows. Keep writing
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Review of My Dearest Son  Open in new Window.
Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I applaud the imagination in this piece. I've never seen it's like before
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Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Marvelous. I felt as if I was a kid again arguing with my sister. Well done
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Review of Butterfly  Open in new Window.
Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
How do you know butterflies are delicious hmmm? :)
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Review of Moonlight  Open in new Window.
Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Interesting wordplay but I wonder: how did the narrator know how long she was wearing that white dress?
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Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)
I don't want to critique it because I think you know it could be better. I'll submit this :And these unusual company . ." shouldn't it be THIS unusual company?

no one ever built a statue of a critic
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Review of To Dream  Open in new Window.
Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
I see emerging talent. But you must stick with it and later it's gonna burn and you'll throw pens and crumple paper but see it thru and something will come of it
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Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love how your piece easily moves from thoughts of bliss to the darkness behind the light.
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Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Intrinsic freedom rings throughout your poem. I nod my head to one who can craft such subtle yet sublime works.
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Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Each story by this writer seems better than the first. Bravo!
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Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Words are not sufficient to express my appreciation of your poem.
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Review of Moon  Open in new Window.
Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Not bad at all. Might be a bit wordy but what do I know?

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Review of The phone  Open in new Window.
Review by Michael Romeo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked it! Well done.

While I think that some contactions could be used

'. . . it breaks my heart to hear, “when do you think he will come home?” It takes a while. . .' (maybe '. . .when he'll come. . .')

though this is just stylistic differences but you'd <-- (example) still adhere to the one-syllable per word exercise and have that extra word to use elsewhere.

It was striking the way you could alienate and join together these two people.


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