This is a nice short piece. It is always a privilege to want to express oneself in writing. However, the first paragraph,"im not a negative nancy", should have been, "I'm not a negative Nancy", and it stood alone, making it to pass for a title. Also, the part that says, "My life is a poem, story , and lyrics", is a nice expression on what the life can be compared to. It could be put better this way, "My life is like a poem, it is my story and the lyrics to my favorite song". Good job!
It's a nice poem. I understood it was about transitions from the quiet and conservative old life to a risky but interesting new life. It is short and simple. Well done💪. However, it is not bad if more lines are added to it. Probably another stanza that dwells more on the new phase in the transition.
I love the story, the flow of words, I also love the progressive path in which all the characters in the story were described. It was short and comprehensive too. I do not know if you intend and to continue the story, but I feel, the ending should be more intriguing than it is (that is if you're planning a continuation though).
This is a nice rhyming piece. I like the fact that this wonderful piece doesn't just rhymes it has deep meanings in every line. My advice is to write more poems, I mean more rhyming poems and before you know it, you'll be writing al the way to WallStreet!
I like this piece because it is short and in my opinion, it conveys the thoughts of the writer. I personally have s flair for writing and I have always thought of leaving something down for my next generation. In conclusion, this piece describes me. Thank you Judi for this!
This is a nice representation of a super-hero. It is well explanatory and has the right words for expression. It sounds like an introduction to a fictional story(smiles). However, you need to watch your punctuation and grammatical structure, these are very important.
Keep it up!
This is a very nice idea, that you've put into words. Well done and keep it up! However, you need to pay close attention to tenses, just that and you'll continue to produce great stories in writing.
What a nice and interesting piece. This opened my imagination and almost seemed real to me when I read through. However, you need to pay attention to your punctuations. Good job!
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