Hi BarbetteLouise ,
I am here to review your poem and give my honest opinion about it. This poem is about the eternal search for a soulmate but it ends in vain due to a possibility of a previous bad experience. I loved the lucidity of language and the beautiful imagery. Well done. Write on!
Hello Thaddeus Buxton Winthrop ,
I am here to review your poem and give my honest opinion about it. This is an excellent poem written in iambic pentameter. Meter and rhyme are flawless. Lovely use of imagery. Ok if written as 'okay' looks better. Great job. Write on!
Hello Dr M C Gupta ,
I am here to review your poem and give my honest opinion about it. This is an excellent poem about the deception that heathens and suicide bombers inflict upon on innocent humans and God. Lovely use of meter and rhythm. Write on!
Hi Tim Chiu ,
I am here to review your poem and give my honest opinion about it. This is an excellent poem about a heavenly meeting becoming a love so cherished. Excellent use of imagery. No suggestions for improvement. Write on!
Hi Tamandani kambuzuma Raincodes ,
I am here to review your poem and give my honest opinion about it. The cameo of feelings was brilliantly portrayed here. I liked your way with the words in this poem. No suggestions for improvement. Write on !
Hi jaya,
I am here to review your poem and give my honest opinion about it. Your poem breathes freshness and celebrates the bliss of freedom, an exhilarating joy to escape from bondage and slavery. Great job. No suggestions for improvement. Write on!
Hi Dr M C Gupta ,
I am here to review your poem and give my honest opinion about it. This is a lovely poem about a septuagenarian who looks back upon his past sixty-nine years and celebrates his life with vigour and joy. The meter and rhyme in this sonnet are perfect. Great job. Write on!
Hi Beholden,
I am here to review your poem and give my honest opinion about it. You have drawn a very vivid picture of the big bang theory and the supernova in the canvas of your mind. Excellent use of imagery. I liked your grasp of words and the profound knowledge they exuded.No suggestions for improvement. Write on!
Hi Azrael13 ,
This is an intriguing start . The plot moves well and there is showing rather than telling. The protagonist is pitted well against the antagonist and I loved the brawl. A conflict comes and it is well resolved at the end. Nice work. Write on !
Hi Margaret ,
I loved this free verse, a Nature poem of trees dancing in an unbridled frenzy with the gusty winds. Beautiful imagery and sensory words capture my mind. The choice of words is excellent. Nice usage of grammar, meter and rhythm. Write on! Koyel~writing again
Hi Prosperous Snow celebrating ,
I loved this cameo poem. The words flow spontaneously and smoothly. You have written an emotive piece of poem. Excellent usage of grammar, meter and rhythm. No other change is required. The imagery is lovely. Write on ! Koyel~writing again
Hi Tinker,
A beautifully crafted poem written in an unique 'Sedoka' style. I did not notice any flaw in grammar, meter or rhythm. A sweet poem welcoming the scallop shells strewn on sand. No change is required. I loved the way you grasped the concept of the picture prompt and let the creativity flow . Write on!
Regards, Koyel~writing again
Hi RodneyGray ,
I loved this fantasy story having a well-grounded plot, a conflict and a resolution at the end. The language and verbiage chosen were apt and nice. The major issue I find here is with the grammar.Like, in the first paragraph itself it should be 'waves of chill' instead of 'wave of chill'. Overall, an enjoyable read. Write on!
Hi The Philosopher ,
I found this poem of yours in the Random Reads and Review section. I liked your theme of the young children at school and their transition to a college.I loved your subject matter. I found the flow of the poem a bit inconsistent and the same with your rhythm and rhyme. I hope this is new to you and you will overcome this soon. Write on!
Hello Anders C. Leyde ,
Overall a nice poem, though a bit too short. I don't know whether you are following a rhyme scheme or not. The first four lines followed a definite rhyme pattern which the last four did not. In fact, no rhyme was present in the last four. A keen observation on the flow reflects that is is uneven. Also there is lack of enough feel in the poem. Just my opinion. Feel free to disregard.
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Hello chardan ,
I read through your poem twice but unfortunately did not find any vigor in it. My honest opinion is that it looked like you were in great hurry to write the poem. The art of poetry is breathing life into our soul, whether having a specified form constricted by meter and rhyme or the smooth flow in a free verse type. Neither was found in your case. Your poem lacked enough feel and you need to evoke ebullience and exuberance in your poem. Poetry is something that builds sensory images in our mind, it is palpable. This is my review . Feel free to disregard it.
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Hello Eneh Akpan,
An enchanting write for the sunrise assignment. I could see everything clearly with the vivid description of your words. The choice of words was excellent enough to make myself the camera man. Actually the strong effect your words has fitted a lens in my eye. The only error detected in this otherwise flawless piece was the grammatical mistake in the last line" sit and wait out the food which came with th rain". What does tht mean?
Write on!
Hello 🌖 HuntersMoon ,
What a fantabulous and refreshing write! The lovely picture adds extra beauty to this flawless poem. I can see and feel the spring through your tangible words. The daft usage of imagery and metaphors enhances the feel.I can sensethe freshness of the spring through ths refreshing write. Write on!
Koyel
Hello Kawika -- Ready for NANO!,
I thouroughly enjoyed this story drawn from your childhood life. The racial and cultural differencs prevalent in the 60's exist to some extent even today.
The story had a well-fitted plot, a conflict in the middle and a resolution at the end. No errors in grammar and punctuation coud be detected. I liked your crafty way of telling tales. Only suggestion is to elaborate a conflict a bit more and a more practical resolution or end. This would entice the readers even more.
Write on!
Koyel Mitra
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Hi siscok,
This is a great poem about the conundrums of the mind. Your free styled rhymes are easy going and very entertaining. You have done an excellent job in unravelling the mysteries of the mind. It is true that we all heave a sigh of relief when we come out of the blues. It is not about insanity but about fluctuations of the mind. Well done.Keep writing!
regards,
Koyel
This review is intended to help you. Accept what you like and reject what you dislike. Title
The title is very catchy and urged me to read forward.
Style and Voice
Elegant style and voice is clear and strong.
Word Choice
Great , painting vibrant images in mind.
Figurative Language
The first line reflects the usage of metaphors and similes. Excellent usage of figurative language.
Rhyme and Rhythm
The rhythm is perfect. I didn't notice any inconsitency.
Structure and Form
This sestina has been executed well, staying true to the prompt.
Imagery
Expressive and exquisite. Evokes a lot of emotions and appeals to the senses.
Theme and Meaning
Memories of childhood, of playing and enjoying in the snow haunt the author.
Personal Opinion
You did a splendid job with this and ought to be the first place winner. I have no suggestions for improvement. Keep writing !
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Dear piewhackett1
This review is intended to help you. Accept what you like and reject what you dislike. This is a lovely , inspirational poem in which the author cherishes his old memories but has young dreams. I liked the emotions in it. Only suggestion is that an addition of a few more lines would make this poem sparkle even more. I wanted some more of it. Keep writing, my friend!
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Hi The Writing Hall
This is quite a good good start to a children's fantasy novel. I found it quite interesting and wanted to find more about it. Your flow is good , as is the command over language. Only two suggestions, I have for you. In the second line "sat" should be replaced by laid , otherwise it sounds awkward and perhaps you wanted to say "startling" instead of "starting". Overall, you did a nice job. Keep writing.
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