dang. i liked this. it was a suprpise ending. but it made me think you hadlike lost your friend when you said your friends facebook message from amonth ago.like whatd she say? just curioous
I really like this, and i say that to alot of people up here but honestly it really made me think and thats another reason i like it bc it was so relatable and every question grabbed my attention even the line where you said i was bored but i really was but you knowing that pulled my attention more and more. You have a great thinking mind. lol.
You're little poem thing is very unique and hard to recognize if youre reading from the top of the page to the bottom. You should put the botttom instructions before the poem because now Im real frustrated and camnt enjoy the poem as much as I wouldve if i understood it aat first. but its great and you musta took a big peice of time with this.
I liked the words you used like intuition and vacant, reality. I feel like there should have been a comma after all means to get information about her. And i think he did. I liked the twised in it about the marriage and the virginity.
I was kinda childish, ya know. Liiike why would an old janitor be nagging about her job this much. Almost sounds like shes whining. But it's cute. Tone the rhyming down. It's not that important.
oh my goodness, i lovvvevee this poem. i like the rhyme theme. well its cute. and i like how you started out tlkn about something else and graduallyt said the girl. mnand it reminded me of nightmare on ellm street a little.
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