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23 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I'm not really sure what my review style is. I will be truthful, honest and respectful. When I review items I usually read them twice to make sure that I'm not missing anything.
I'm good at...
I really pay attention to spelling, grammar and punctuation. I also pay attention to make sure there aren't any discrepancies in the story.
Favorite Genres
Sci-fi, Fantasy, Drama, Mystery,Horror, Steampunk, Historical, Action and Comedy
Least Favorite Genres
Romance
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories Essays Chapters Novels
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Technical Articles Children's Stories
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Public Reviews
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Review by countrygirl322 - Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
It brought a smile to my face. You left the "y" off of "they long".
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the imagery of this piece. I didn't see any spelling errors. As you know I'm not a poet but this is another of your pieces that just grabs me and allows me to see the world through your eyes. I know this isn't a very good review and that you will need more but I just wanted to tell you that you are very talented and to thank you for sharing another great poem.
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Review by countrygirl322 - Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked the story. I didn't see any problems with your spelling or punctuation but since I'm learning or relearning all of that again I might have missed something. The characters were well built and drew you farther into the story. However, I did see one problem and that is your usage of adverbs. You use quite a few of them one right after the other. You might want to try using synonyms instead of all the -ly words.

Here are some examples: The shop was a mere three yards from the house.... - if you replace barely with mere then you can use extraordinarily without a problem in the next sentence. Although, I might put it before fatigued instead of after.
Take out unusually before odd so the sentence reads The door made an odd creaking noise
And instead of "The door shut automatically with a bang" try the door slammed shut and then possibly add "startling Antonio".

Remember this is just my take on it and I'm learning as well. But I think these changes would help the story to flow better. All in all it was a great story and quite interesting.


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Review by countrygirl322 - Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! I love this poem. I don't know about others that have lost a child but for me this hit every single emotion I felt after my miscarriage, the doubt, the anger and the struggle to be rid of those emotions and trust that God had a purpose to call my child home even before I got to meet her. Thank you so much for sharing this. I am in awe of your talent.
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Review of HUMAN  Open in new Window.
Review by countrygirl322 - Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I loved the simple imagery of this poem. I don't read many poems but the title intrigued me. I didn't see anything that needed improving. It is a well written piece and I enjoyed reading it. You captured what I believe most if not all humans feel. Your grammar was right on as was your punctuation. Again I don't read many poems so someone else might catch issues that I didn't see. Good job and welcome to WDC.


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Review by countrygirl322 - Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I know the poem you spoke of and re-read it just a few weeks ago. Your article is well written and I thoroughly enjoyed it. I felt your uncertainty at inspiring others with your words, musical talent and actions. We all have that uncertainty and well all hope that people remember us and are inspired by our lives. Thank you for sharing! By the way, I didn't find any grammatical or punctuation errors. Great job.
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Review of Shattered Gold  Open in new Window.
Review by countrygirl322 - Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow...Fantastic story. It drew me in and held me captive. The imagery was amazing I saw the world that you created. I hope there is more to this story. I would like to see what happens next to each character. Does the villian/conspirator get away cleanly? Or is he caught and brought swiftly to justice? What happens to Pride and the rest? I think all readers would like to know more. It is written well you did a great job.


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