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Review by Kerrigan Sheehan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
It's a good essay, all around, however, I feel that it needs transitions between paragraphs. The vocabulary and use of rhetorical techniques are definately strong. I particularly like the part where you connected a quote from the 1800s to today and the part where you made up some rediculous-sounding product and made an example of it.
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Review by Kerrigan Sheehan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I wish more people would write anti-war songs now. When my parents were my age, Vietnam was in full-swing. Students would have walk-outs, and people would write anti-war songs, but now the musicians won't do it because of the fear of wiretapping. I'm glad you wrote this. At least someone isn't afraid to speak their mind.
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Review by Kerrigan Sheehan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
VERY beautiful, yet very similar to The Sandman series and American Gods both by Neil Gaiman and the Nightside series by Simon R. Green with a little James Joyce thrown in for good measure. Your work was enjoyable, and, despite a couple of small mechaincal errors (but we all make those), it was nearly flawless. Some would say the stream-of-consciousness style is hard to follow, but it makes a lot of sense here, and I applaud you for using it appropriately. I enjoyed how the present is juxtaposed against the past, especially with the use of italics. I also really liked how the story ends only implying what might happen to John. I think it was also a good choice to give him an "everyman" kind of name, which made him so much easier to relate to. Overall, a beautiful piece.
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