Hey Deborah,
Your piece of flash fiction is really nicely written, love the use of language, and it's pretty impactful.
However, as a humble suggestion, maybe try and improve the beginning a little bit, with some sort of hook. You really enjoy doing descriptions, and you're very good at it, but maybe try and tone down just a little bit on those?
Otherwise it's really nice.
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