The way the first letters are capitalized is a great style element, and I'm inspired by them. The piece flowed with as much ease as the author's experience seems to be, and maybe that's why I didn't feel the tighness that I usually expect. I did get a peek into your psyche, and I could see you smile throughout. Let me know if I'm right or wrong.
It evoked a few emotions: disgust, surprise, "Yeah! Sure! Why not!". I like the style. The descriptions added substance to the narration and made the world believable.
It's poetic, and like all poems, I did get confused in between. "Beware of" is the more usual phrase, but today I learnt that "Beware" is itself enough. Also, the use of "spit out" had me confused. I guess the desired meaning is "the dark shadows eat up all the joy, and all that's left is unholy.". The phrase "spit out" did not immediately convey the sense "all that's left." and seemed more like "even the darkening shadows don't want to consume the unholy." As I read the poem a second time to write this review, I understood it better, and probably that's how poems are.
I got goosebumps reading this; my eyes almost welled up, but before tears could escape, the story ended with a twist. The sentences are of perfect length and complexity. I didn't have to reread any sentence. The first paragraph is so stylish.
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