I like this story a lot so far, but it just needs a bit of work to finish off some of the loose ends. The story with Lana could be excellent if filled out, as it's easy to picture her gorgeous body in your head. The part with Kara is less good, but is still interesting and could finish up nicely, especially as she could be the only character who could eat him!
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