I interpet this as depression and loss of all hope. I thought it nicely executed. However, I was not able to relate with it and perhaps that is because I have never felt that depth of depression. You did though enable me to understand the loss of hope. There really isn't anything I would change with this. You have done a wonderful job of writing. Invalid ReviewWriting ML and All! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
What a wonderful poem! You painted a very nice image of a rainy afternoon. I was able to imagine looking out those panes of glass. You did a very nice job creating this image with the descriptive words you chose. I think all writers can relate to finding inspiration in the most surprising ways. Very nicely excuted! Review of "Gangsta Space Aliens WIP Chapters"My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
This is beautiful. I find inspiration from your words. God is always there for us. even when we don't seek him. It's a little wordy, I would try some editting in some areas. You do have a beautiful idea and it starts out well. "I will look to his kingdom first in my life", I would try playing with the words, maybe switching some around. I really like the last six lines. Good work, keep it up.
I really enjoyed reading this. You did a great job of grabing my interest and keeping it there. You built the story slowly, and with descriptive words you were able to pull me into the story. I could find nothing wrong with this. Would like to become a fan and read more writings if you would not mind. Keep up the good work!
You have a really great story line. How like the end of this, it helped me to see where it is going and made me want to read more. At times I felt there was a little to much information and I would start to lose interest. I am very glad I continued to read. This story has great potential. Would love to see more, and will look forward to reading and reviewing. Keep up the good work.
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