first of all i love the title. it just fits so well. however though the last line could have been written way better. to me i feels like it was rushed and i didnt rhyme like the other lines did. i wish you would have made it rhyme because it doesnt fit with the last lines at all. the use of imagery was great. good job!
i like how this poem was talking about time and how they know things could never last forever. my favorite line is "as we get older, there will be nothing left to remember". that line just speaks the truth to me. i did see one typo im assuming but that happens sometimes. just make sure you read over it again after youre done. great job though!
this poem was excellent, i enjoyed it so much. there were a lot of grammar errors but those are just little things that can be fixed. my favorite line was "they are the spark to every mans dream". that line was so true and towards the end i felt the power about how women are strong even though some may see them as fragile and weak. overall i loved everything about this poem even though there are a few things i would change but great job! oh and i love the use of imagery.
The word choices were really good and i liked the use of imagery. However though i could not clearly understand the poem until towards the end. This poem could be made more clear and that would probably make more people want to view it. I noticed when i was reading it the lack of interest i had but at the end it picked up for me. Overall i enjoyed it!
I felt so connected to this poem. I knew exactly what you were talking about. Highschool love is a very delicate thing for such young people. Anything can destroy it and anything can bring it back together. It's just a very confusing time for teens and it can be an extremely difficult time but when you look back on it you cherish those memories of your first loves. Overall great job!
There were some points in the poem where i was a little lost but reading it a second time i understand better. I could tell there were a few grammar errors thoughout but those aren't major things, they can be fixed. I also enjoyed the use of rhyme. Overall i connected really well with this. I felt emotional. My favorite part of this was the imagery, there was a ton and i enjoyed it. Good job!
Whenever you do love poems it's really difficult because you don't want to repeat the same stuff that's been said over and over. With this poem though, it's different. I felt a very strong emotional connection throughout this and that's something that writers need to do is connect with their readers. Somewhere along the way i'm pretty sure that everyone has felt some kind of heart break. Very good job!
I liked the box theme that going was going on. i just wish there was more imagery is i could actually visual what was going on. I also wish that more rhyme was involved, that would have made it a little better in my opinon. Overall this poem was good because it connects with all audiences. Great job!!
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