I don't really like the way this is written or the word choice being used. The stanzas also do not flow, but i like the feeling that was put into your writing.
I really enjoyed this poem and I connected with it. I do love the way you chose to write the stanzas and it flows well. I do believe this poem could use improvement with the diction, but other than that I really liked it.
I like the emotion put into this poem, but I don't see how the first stanza where you're talking about the rocking chair beginning to move connects with the rest of your lines. Overall, I did like this poem, and the word choices as well. I would also try to make it where the words flow more as you're transitioning into the next stanza.
The last two lines were my favorite out of this poem. The word choice is nice, but I would try to be more descriptive on the topic you're writing about.
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