As a leader into another article or another paragraph, this may have its merits. It makes a powerful statement. Hydrogen is an alternative to fossil fuels. But the statement left me wanting. Every time we write we need a beginning, middle and an end. This was a great beginning, but offered no evidence of the statements made, finality or redirection. The piece does not answer with any scientific facts, whether it can or cannot be the fuel of the future, only that it is now being used.
Where are the W’s, (Who, What, hoW, When, Where and Why)? There are several obvious ones like the What – Hydrogen, the how – buildings cars etc. However, I feel lacking in the who and why it should be considered over other alternatives.
As a scientific article, it should either give me the evidence or send me to where I can find the evidence. Do not just make a statement without justification; or as an alternative turn the statement into a question.
As a leader, it has its merits but needs far more to satisfy my curiosity on the subject.
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