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I like to be honest and write about how I feel and what I see. It doesn't mean I'm always right - it means I'm telling you how your work affects me. I'll try to tell you the good with the bad, but don't expect fluff. Fluff sucks.
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Looking at format, spelling and some punctuation...except commas. I hate commas.
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Technical essays, overly detailed fantasies and poetry.
I will not review...
Items that show no obvious effort at editing before promoting for review. If you spell "i" instead of "I", I will close the page and not review it. We're not idiots here.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello The Uplifting Essayist Author Icon

What a beautiful story of generousity being rewarded! A truly generous person doesn't expect anything in return, but here the reward was great.
I liked the story and found it inspiring.
Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet* "As a human being" ~ I assume you meant this as a hint but in context it was confusing until I read the whole story. Suggest leaving it out.
*Bullet* "woollen" ~ woolen
*Bullet* "A lovely voice suddenly rang out in the kitchen." ~ I feel like it would be more indicative if the voice came from above?
Overall, a lovely story.

Regards,
Kim
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Review of My Golden Life  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Amare Jane Author Icon
You did a fine job of showing the progression of age in this writing. It made me a bit sad as I have an older cat who is 14 this year. Pets bring us so much joy, it's hard to think of them leaving us.

I didn't recognize a poetry form, but the stanzas felt pretty natural

Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet* You wrote about the snores...but the other end? *Laugh*

Overall, lovely writing. Thank you for posting.

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Kim
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jeffrey Meyer Author Icon

This was a cute little story! You did well and made the most of the word count available and included the prompt phrase. I enjoyed how you crafted the impatient back and forth of his look while waiting. And thank you for giving your reader a charming ending.

No suggestions for edit *Cut*
It's lovely as it stands.

Overall, well-written and heartfelt. Well done.


Regards,
Kim

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Review of The Park Cleaner  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Damon Nomad Author Icon

I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

I liked your story. It fit the quotation prompt. You did a good job describing Clyde and Wally and their life choices. It certainly becomes ironic when he inherits the fortune.

Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet* The only thing that bothered me was Clyde had already tried changing, and the money made it easier. Just a reader comment.

Overall, a sweet story!

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Kim
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Adherennium Author Icon

I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

What an amusing story. It fit the quotation prompt well. While it felt very 'fairy tale', the story carried on to be charming and lesson-worthy. Your character Vladimira was very funny.

Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet* sent out several bike men, who ~ this felt a little confusing, even in context.

Overall, witty, charming and a lovely story with a happily ever after ending. Well done.

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Kim
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello John Author Icon

I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

I found your story inspiring and frightening at the same time, for the same reason Kiara felt it. You did a fantastic job of building the story without a ton of description or even dialog. I'm impressed. You did well with the prompt.

Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet* a way to keep her gaze focused horizonta
lly, scanning the horizon for external problems ~ just a format issue

Overall, a fantastic read. Thank you.

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Kim
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Review of His Mother Cried  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello THANKFUL SONALI Happy 2026! Author Icon

I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

I liked your story. It's so common in the school systems for this to happen. Your dialog really helped pull the emotional heart-strings of the reader. Lucky Nishad.
I enjoyed Sharanya as a strong character, well done! You did well using the contest prompt.

No suggestions for edit *Cut*:


Overall, a good representation of the things happening to dyslexic and other challenged children in the schools.

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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello Amethyst Snow Angel Author Icon

I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

This was quite the sad story. Although pretty common in a family that loses a parent. Perhaps a reader would learn something from this and try to communicate.
This story would also be a good lesson for a career-track father uninterested in parenting.
I liked your characters and was happy to see a good ending. You followed the prompt.

No suggestions for edit *Cut*

*Heart* "Go in there and be a dad, ok?"

Overall, a good story.

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Kim
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Review of A Change of Heart  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Sumojo Author Icon

I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

I liked your story, the lessons that come unexpected seem to be the most important. I liked your world-building, descriptive but not taking the forefront of the story. The rain mess made me laugh. You used the prompt well.

Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet* puddles, left after the deluge. ~ no comma

Overall, an enjoyable story. Well done.

Regards,
Kim
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello PureSciFi Author Icon

I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

This was definitely a riveting story. I enjoyed the concept of the Illness but got a little lost in who would actually get infected. A reader should be happy that Kevom finally revealed what it was.

Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet* "Elizibith leans forward in her Seat toward Kevom" ~ no cap on Seat
*Bullet* "I’m not the one who let it lose to affect the whole world.” ~ loose

Overall, loved the concept, would make a great movie.

Regards,
Kim
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello LightinMind Author Icon

I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

A fascinating story. I expected the king to be educated, which he did, but not in the way I expected. I didn't read the historical notes until after I read the story, and it was interesting to read. The story stood well on its own, following the prompt.

Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet* and gilt, beautiful, but weighing upon him like guilt. ~ the gilt/guilt felt confusing

Overall, a good read.

Regards,
Kim
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Review of Getting it Right  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Emberly Gray Author Icon
What a beautiful poem of discovered love.
I liked the feel of a story in there.
If this had a specific form, I didn't recognize it.
The little heart made it sweet, I'm not normally a fan of emojis in writing, but this seemed to work.


Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet*Not sure you needed the dashes "came so quietly—"


Overall, a lovely read. Thanks for sharing.


Regards,
Kim

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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Carol St.Ann Author Icon
I loved this! Mostly because I can totally relate to the narrator. I have had the exact same thing happen to a show, which I dearly wanted to see. Nothing like dropping into your seat in a sweat!

I so enjoyed the humorous asides and quotes.

Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet* "traveling into the City in daylight" ~ No cap, I know, I know, NYC should have caps lol

Overall, a fun anecdote!

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Kim

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Review of Sweetheart Sitter  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello ChristineB Author Icon

Thanks for entering "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window.!
I understand this is a short contest and take that into consideration, so please take these comments and suggestions as merely my opinion of what was posted.

Comments:
A sad story, but I liked the picture of devotion. I liked the thought of the world being "brilliant" and "fascinating". My suggestions are only regarding things that made me pause.

Suggestions: *Cut*
*Bullet*2nd stanza - Remove the "but" from two lines, not necessary

Overall:
A lovely poem to read.

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Review of WC 9/9  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello DS Author Icon

Thanks for entering "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window.!
I understand this is a short contest and take that into consideration, so please take these comments and suggestions as merely my opinion of what was posted.

Comments:
A clever poem, with the fun reveal at the end. My suggestions are merely things that made me pause, or for easier reading.

Suggestions: *Cut*
*Bullet*"And the things you need to do,"
*Bullet*"They'll just slobber over all her toys,"

Overall:
A very charming poem, I enjoyed.
Congratulations on the win!

Writer's Cramp!


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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello DS Author Icon

Thanks for entering "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window.!
I understand this is a short contest and take that into consideration, so please take these comments and suggestions as merely my opinion of what was posted.

Comments:
This was interesting to read, more of a throwback with 50 being now instead of the future. Clever. You met the prompt and added the genres, well done. This felt like it was historical.

*Heart*: "An angelic site where we can't yet post."

Suggestions: *Cut*
*Bullet*"'cross" ~ Could have been across.

Overall:
I liked the heavenly story.
Writer's Cramp!


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello iKïyå§ama Author Icon

Thanks for entering "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window.!
I understand this is a short contest and take that into consideration, so please take these comments and suggestions as merely my opinion of what was posted.

Comments:
I loved that this was heartfelt tribute built into the story. You met the prompt and genres.

I so adored the virtual party! We need to do this before 50!

Suggestions: *Cut*
*Bullet*"carrying a vase brimming with the very blossoms the machine had been rambling about." ~ I might have missed the rambling?

Overall:
The sweetest tribute story, it really tugged on the heartstrings.
Writer's Cramp!


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Review of Wattle We Do  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello THANKFUL SONALI Happy 2026! Author Icon

Thanks for entering "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window.!
I understand this is a short contest and take that into consideration, so please take these comments and suggestions as merely my opinion of what was posted.

Comments:
This was the cutest poem!
It almost felt like a nursery rhyme we tell our children with hand gestures and everything.
You met the prompt requirements including the genres.

Suggestions: *Cut*
*Bullet*Perhaps dropnote the prompt at the end, later.

Overall:
This had me a chuckling, I really enjoyed this birthday poem! Congrats on your win, I'm glad you entered.
Writer's Cramp!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello ChristineB Author Icon

Thanks for entering "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window.!
I understand this is a short contest and take that into consideration, so please take these comments and suggestions as merely my opinion of what was posted.

Comments:
What a fun concept...plant to human translator! If only I had one for my houseplants *Sad* And how ironic a plant would enter Cramp!
No edit Suggestions: *Cut*
You met the criteria for word count and genres.

Overall:
Love the story.
Writer's Cramp!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Saša Milivojev Author Icon
Welcome to WDC!
Welcome to Writing.com!
How exciting you found our site on WDC's 25th birthday, all the way from Serbia!
I hope you join in the fun!

I found your item on the *Wdc-readreview* Read & Review link in the left column.
         This was a powerful read, each stanza suggesting an even more horrific atrocity of our times.

Suggestion for edit *Cut*:

*Bullet*"The end with the punishment" ~ Suggest only "The punishment"

Overall, a good strong write.


Regards,
Kim

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Review of Ashes and stars  Open in new Window.
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello Passion Author Icon
Welcome to WDC! Welcome to WDC!
Loved this story, who doesn't love a bad boy character *Laugh*

A few suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet*I'm old, my eyes are crappy and the tiny font strains them. There's a place to edit font size in the edit bar.
*Bullet*Line breaks are good, yours seem large.
*Bullet*If you wrote this to enter a contest, it's handy to link the contest {item:xxxxxx} so reviewers can look at the prompt, etc.

Overall, my comments are offered in good spirit and helpfulness.


Regards,
Kim

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Review of A Piece of Cake  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello LoneWolf Author Icon
Welcome to WDC!First off, welcome to Writing.com, I hope you're finding your way around okay.

This was a nice little scenario. I liked the added touch of patriotism. You did well incorporating the prompt words.
The wry humor made me smile, well done.

No suggestions for edit *Cut*:

Overall, a good write, I hope you did well in the contest.


Regards,
Kim

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Review of JUST ME  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Mary Ann MCPhedran Author Icon

Thank you for sharing this; it gave me a chuckle. I got to know the narrator in so few lines and can relate, especially people watching. It's such a delight finding these little happy nuggets in the Read & Review.

No suggestions for edit *Cut*

Overall, always lovely to find good things from our members to enjoy. Thank you for all you share and do in our community.


Regards,
Kim

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Review of Mabel And The Mob  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello W.D.Wilcox Author Icon
As always, you never let me down, your stories amuse. We always wonder what we'd do with a suitcase of money. Don't we? I always say if I won the lottery, I'd travel.


Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet* The only suggestion would change Murray from mumbling to trying to shout when Mabel makes her quick exit.

Overall, a great read, thanks for sharing.

Regards,
Kim

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Princess Megan Rose Author Icon

I love this list! It reminds me of all the great Prince songs.
I can't believe he'll be gone 10 years in April. Opioids have taken out so many talented people.
I liked how you did the font in purple (of course).

Some suggestions for edit *Cut*:
*Bullet*#5 - the title is "I Could Never Take The Place of Your Man" on the album Sign 'O' The Times.
*Bullet*Perhaps describe how he influenced you life.

Overall, great list! Thanks for sharing.

Regards,
Kim

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