Hello, I really liked your poem. It was written with well words to describe the incident of the matter. Love is dying and this person is willing to fight till the end. as we all do for the one's we love. it if it means to endure some toxicity along the way. The point is not to get lost in the process. Keep writing.
What a sad and dark story. Makes me appreciate my mom, as my mom did everything in her power to take care of me and ensure that I was okay. This tells of a girl that had a mom that was a drunk and mean. it speaks volumes of emotional trauma.
I liked how you managed to keep my interest. the writng was very intricate, unraveling itself to the conclusion that the reason why everyone was running around was beacuse of narrator. Was not expecting that. Keep on writing.
This reminds me of Noah's ark, type of situation. THere is always hope at our darkest hour. Even if we cannot see it at the time. Good poem. I liked it.
Ah, hope. The true villain in the story. I know because I was once there. Good thing that veil falls off and we discover the truth. Nothing wrong with hope but reality eventually kicks in. Good poem. It hit a memory in my past and for that its a good one. Keep on writing.
You story seems interesting to read. However, it is hard to read it since there are a lot of typos. I would advise you to re-read it and make the changes.
talk about the hard life. i have been there myself. this spoke to me and about my journey in life when i was young. I would recommend that you spell check this peom as well with the typos. Good story but with all the typos it takes u out of the story.
Hello, I liked your story. or poem. It kept my interest. However, I would recommend that you take a moment and edit your work. There are a few typos and there are missing words. That is the only thing that took me out of the story. I see the potential.
The story has potential. I thought I was reading a chapter but then it ended with her turning him into a bag... If you should decide to write a full story I think Dale should become her enemy. Right now its a little unbalanced. But with great potential.
reminds me of how i am unable to sleep at night. Sleep does not fear me, its my thoughts that make it fear what I can fall into. If that makes sense. This kept my interest and i liked it alot.
Hello there. I understand your situation. I am the same way. I love my nieces and nephews but I don't want kids. they are annoying and just plain evil. That is just me. I would rather be the cool aunt, nothing more. Pretty good way of expressing your feelings. Keep on writing.
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