Hello, The irony of this story at the end. Jack died in the hands of other muggers. This gave me a feeling of an edgar allen poe story. the heart underneath the wood board. and then another story where the ghost or monster comes back for his toe. Anyhow, great story. It kept my interst.
Hello, Very nicely writen about love for someone and then yourself. I have been there myself. Painful, yet rewarding, when you realize that loving youserlf is alot better. Then trying to love crumbs. If that makes sense.
Hello, this poem of lost love of a good friend, is a sad one but understandable. It is writen with strong words to express a feeling of loss and a time were everything is at a standstill. Minimal words, yet, impacting. Great work.
Hello, your story is good. It has potential to be more. I would advise to re-read it and remove the extra wording that is needed. I think that is what took me out of the scene. when the story said:
"she would never be in the shower longer than 20 minutes knowing that bills were higher this month."
We really dont need to know about the bills being higher, unless it was tied with the story somehow. It removes me from the intensity that is being build up.
All I can say is beautiful! That is my goal in life. And the cat is a purrrrfect gift. They will always be there for you. I loved the way you described surroundings. I felt as though I was there with the cat. It made me forget i was at work.
I know what you mean. There is sorrow when the heart is heavy. But there is also joy. It's how we respond. We may not be able to control a situation but we can control how we listen and react. I loved your poem. straight to the point. I like that alot.
I would say to first find out who you are before and then you will know what you are looking for in life and in someone.I would then advise to reread your poem and fix some of the errors. But other then that, it was good.
Hello,
I understand the struggle of writing and feeling as though no one is watching or reading your words. But this place will show you that you are being heard. I liked what you wrote. The struggles and the thought of never giving up. Which is a good thing. Never give up. I'll tell you this, even if no one reads my stories I will leave them to my family. A little piece of me that they will always remember me by, and that is worth writing about. Never give up and good luck.
Hello. What a sad story about a girl that never feels enough. I liked it. The poem demostrated what she feels and how she is dealing with it. very good. keep on writing.
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