Ah, hope. The true villain in the story. I know because I was once there. Good thing that veil falls off and we discover the truth. Nothing wrong with hope but reality eventually kicks in. Good poem. It hit a memory in my past and for that its a good one. Keep on writing.
You story seems interesting to read. However, it is hard to read it since there are a lot of typos. I would advise you to re-read it and make the changes.
talk about the hard life. i have been there myself. this spoke to me and about my journey in life when i was young. I would recommend that you spell check this peom as well with the typos. Good story but with all the typos it takes u out of the story.
Hello, I liked your story. or poem. It kept my interest. However, I would recommend that you take a moment and edit your work. There are a few typos and there are missing words. That is the only thing that took me out of the story. I see the potential.
I understand about living. I do see potential in this poem. However, I am not so sure if this is just thoughts just being jot down or if this is lacking an ending. Or maybe a beginning. There are several things going on here that it makes it kinda hard to get into. Either way, I do appreciate the words.
The story has potential. I thought I was reading a chapter but then it ended with her turning him into a bag... If you should decide to write a full story I think Dale should become her enemy. Right now its a little unbalanced. But with great potential.
reminds me of how i am unable to sleep at night. Sleep does not fear me, its my thoughts that make it fear what I can fall into. If that makes sense. This kept my interest and i liked it alot.
Hello there. I understand your situation. I am the same way. I love my nieces and nephews but I don't want kids. they are annoying and just plain evil. That is just me. I would rather be the cool aunt, nothing more. Pretty good way of expressing your feelings. Keep on writing.
I liked this piece. It really got into the mind of someone who is trying to be okay, even though we all know that we are not. or maybe we are. Who knows. One thing that had my attention till the end is the little voice, that monster that can wake up anytime and just drop us down on our butt. Keep on writing.
An escort indeed. I like what you wrote. Just ashame it ended so quickly. I don't feel as though there was an ending. at least for me. It kept my interest. Keep on writing.
After this, I feel like I gotta go to a tree and apologize. Good poem. Especially since it was in the point of view of the tree. even the tree can see how people just rush by and dont enjoy life anymore.
This one hit because I have been there. The words express what phase you are in the relationship. Sadly to say that, if there is no help, it is at the end. The man you miss no longer exist. at least not for you. you miss the old him and dont know the new guy. wish you the best. this kept my interest till the end.
I felt the pain! It hit hard cause I know how this feels. Wouldn't it be nice if we could just turn off those feelings?? Sadly we cannot. Good words, kept my interest. I hope things get better. keep on writing.
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