This is a very moving, inspiring, sweet article. The writing, style, language, everything is perfect for the situation. If ever true love can be believed in, it would result in something like this, giving up divine existence for the companionship of someone you love. I have read many romances and many fail to give that normal, daily life feeling in relationships that you have portrayed here. The emotional proximity of these two people is very touching.
All in all, excellent. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. In fact, I think I'm close to becoming a regular reader. Please, keep it up!
Superb! I loved every moment of it! What an entertaining story!
I can find only minuscule flaws. Of course, I would have preferred more descriptive writing, but I guess that's how you write. Still, please consider describing the surroundings and the people in more detail. It's a very important part of fantasy. It lets you into the world and makes it more visible. But then, I'm not exactly a professional and - as I said before - I found this story extremely entertaining, so Good Job!
My best regards.
I loved it. It's like a...well it's excellent uptil now and i'd love to watch it. The first part is a little bit too common. You know, the killed-by-relatives-parent-and-sent-to-orphanage bit, but the insight it gives into the actual "right" of the wrong-doers is what I love about it. Though that kind of concept is coming up a lot these days. Plus it was funny while i read it, I'm positive it'll be funnier if I watch it. Pleas continue and try to publish, if you wish to. Good luck!
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